The plot is good you introduced a lot within 7 chapters although it's not much try to update chapters like 3 chapters a week that will be much faster for you to get the plot somewhere that we the readers could understand but the characters are well written you can understand their ego and emotion i really enjoyed your work i hope you don't stop there cause i would like to see what's gonna happen with logan
Disclaimer: I've only read the first 31st (free) chapters. I don't mind it being cliche, but everything is bland.The writing is one of, if not, the main issue. I would suggest the author add more structure going forward because right now, it is a mess: the sentence structures and tenses are all over the place, author notes are added in the middle of the chapters (more on that later) and the narration is basic, at best.The pacing does not let you immerse yourself in the novel because the reader is simply flown from one point of interest to another with barely some background info on what is happening as a whole, and the rest is time skipped. Finally, the most infuriating thing about this novel are the author's notes in the middle of the chapters. Not even speaking about the 4th wall, the notes explaining what the few lines before implied are the worst, removing fluidity of an already tedious read.
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I walked a dark path away from a falling sun that shed no light. I happened upon a man who's only visible sight was his third eye. He snapped his fingers and at the tips a flint sent souls around us. I clapped my hands, bowed my head and my past souls from my third eye's light had found us. A war took place, until I saw his face. His sign of strain became his weakness. Next thing I knew, I heard his pain, my two fingers to his eye caused death to cloud his features. 300 souls from him to me did flee....
Simply amazing ???I’m speechless I just love the story line and everything
This is a MUST READ! The plot is so good. The character development is not cliche. They have strengths as well as weaknesses which makes it a little bit more realistic. Oh! And I love how Hua'er is treasured by Lou and her family. I can't wait for LQX to fall for her???
didn't know there is a sequel to forgotten legend of the bloodied flower!!! i just know this book will be good too!!
Okay, so while the story was a little slow to start, by chapter 3 things started to interesting. The characters and realistic as are there interactions. This story does have a lot of potential, it is just that the grammar mistakes make it a little hard to read.Anyway, good job author.
I never would have thought that this would be an interesting webnovel, but once I started reading the first couple of chapters, it was PRETTY GOOD. Never expected it to be this cool. It was confusing in the first few chapters but when I read more it became more clearer. Wish there was a comic like this.
yeah, not my cup of tea. MC rolls over whenever the girl wants something. Forgiving the guy who tried to kill you just a minute ago because the girl thinks he's a good guy?
This ongoing WebNovel is quickly becoming one of my favorites. The author's world-building is so intricate and the characters are so complex that I'm constantly fascinated by their stories. The plot twists and turns are so unexpected that I never know what's going to happen next. I highly recommend this WebNovel to anyone who loves a good ongoing read!
I've enjoyed every minute i spent reading this novel. Good balance of world building, character development, serious plot, and humor. Lots of humor. A but tongue in cheek sometimes, but definitely enjoyable.