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I really like the story, it's entertaining and interesting to read. There are some awkward interactions between characters, some pieces of writing that don't seem to flow with the story. There is also an enormous amount of missing words, if the story was lacking in any way I would have dropped this before chapter two just because of how many times I have to guess what word should be where. It's like you didn't even bother to proofread this at all. How can so many errors be present in such a good story? So depressing.
A very cool world with a very unique background. The language is solid and easy to read. All in all a good story in my opinion. Keep up the good work.
Very interesting looking forward to it
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The story and characters are great! BUT the grammar is a big OOF!! You need to get an editor or hire a new one because there are a ton of errors that ruin the flow of the story. Work hard and don't give up!
Not bad there is room for development with some creativity you should be able to get up and running in no time
the book is amazing the death of the 'cricketer friend' was really depressing though
This is the author's mental dump place, I mean, maybe you'll find good stuff? First Volume consists first version of Moon Rabbit: Threaded FateSecond Volume will consist of the mental dump, you know, just good old fashioned narcissism? But yeah, maybe some interesting thoughts on characters and letting you guys know I'm alive lol
?? Have not figured out where this is going but it a waste of time to read. I waited to the third chapter to give this review.But the 2 and 3 chapter are mess. I had to go back to look a the 1st chapter to see what I was reading.To read this is to forget it. Don’t waste your time now.
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