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Writing quality is good.The start and concept was interesting.sadly the mc and the story developement ruins it.Overfriendly i have to pay back social debts kind of mc.Add to that bad battles.Story might be interesting for people with a lighter and younger taste or for children
Alright now let me start with this. I really like this novel. It has flaws, don't get me wrong, but I can look past them. Let me just get the flaws out of the way. The writing quality can be poor at times, though it usually maintains a consistent mediocrity. If I remember correctly the author is not a native english speaker, however tries his best with the aid of Grammarly. This means it's readable, but mistakes will be noticeable.The second flaw is the romance. This is a harem. Neglect play seems to be a fetish of the mc's and boy does he not care if everyone knows it. Jokes aside, the mc does acquire a lot of women, and from what I have read in the synopsis there are even more to be acquired. He obviously doesn't have the time to deal with them all, and will likely consistently ignore a group of them who simply aren't near him. He also isn't super clear about his intentions to love multiple people with anyone but this one heroine who also double's as current best girl.Final flaw is a matter of personal preference, and not something that is necessarily a problem. In fact it hasn't even happened yet. Dimension jumping. For the love of gosh, please dont send him to different universes, he has enough stuff to worry about already. Its fine as is please don't.Anyways, two flaws and personal plea aside, the rest of the story is good. The action is fast and doesn't drag on. The main character is smart while not making inexplicable decisions, the heroines are (mostly) memorable and have their own personalities and thoughts. The system, while sentient, doesn't abuse it's sentience to make the mc do as it wishes. There's also a bit of cringe, but not enough to cause second hand embarrassment. The comedy is also pretty good. It also doesn't hide the seggs from you for 100+ chaps.All in all, besides the romance and writing, everything else is solid.3/5Keep it up lad!
Amazing first 150 chapters, strong next 75 too. All starts to go downhill after leaving Nitis though in my opinion.Despite the obvious need for Liiza and Khan to split (she was taking up way too much of the plot), the author's justification is pretty poor.The random flings and romances thereafter only serve to give 'proof' to the readers that moving in from Liiza was the right decision.Overall very strong novel, but the poor romance developments have really disappointed me. If you can beat with that you'll thoroughly enjoy it though.
I have currently read up to the latest chapter as of the time I am posting this, writing quality is very good and I haven’t found many mistakes so far, the updateing is pretty consistent, story development is good since there is already a goal to be achieved by the mc and others and although the idea of the in-game abilities becoming real is cliched and has already been done this one is somewhat unique from my knowledge and it will be both exciting and entertaining to see how the mc develops, the world background hasn’t been explained in great detail but there has been some information given about the world’s background and how it could develop so overall the world background is adequate and doesn’t affect the story’s quality, this book as a whole is quite good and I would recommend giving it a read and to preserve with it since the start is a little confusing/slow but it gets better as you go along
Easily the best one of this batch. Simple and fun to read. Basically, the MC got transmigrated, ghost are appearing in this world, he just goes around beating them up. The humor matches the tone of the story. Plot is not giga garbage so far. The only complaint I have is the inconsistent pronouns, but that's the case for every trial read nowadays. Overall, me likey.
Whoever likes Sign-In Buddha's Palm, vote for this! This is a great, and for-reals low-key OP MC. Although not as low-key as Buddha's Palm, so far there are no signs of the MC exposing himself, or the frustrating 'hinting that the OP guy is actually me.'
The fact that this is getting pushed back in favor of novels below the fourth star mark shows that junk food has become way too popular. At least this has some nutrients. Donate your spirit stones for healthy living!
A good novel with good potencial. The MC is really OP and he isn't a d*ck. The harem is pretty good, a bit to large for my taste though. The main team and the guild, although there is room for improvement, its not bad, they're funny. The worldbuilding is quite interesting and there are misterys in the background yet to be discovered. The R18 scenes are 10/10 the best of the novel.
Haven't read yet but I love the introduction or prologue i guess. I trust the author's work this time hohoho keep up the good work, author !!!
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Will be honest about it. There are many grammatical mistakes which you need to correct. The plot is interesting and and so are the characters. I've ten chapters so far and I liked it. Keep updating and make us smile! Fighting Author! ?