I love this!!I'm only on the first few chapters, but I really like how this story was set up. The quality of this story is actually much higher than a lot of the contracted novels here. There are some grammatical errors here and there, but that doesn't matter to me as long as I can grasp the story. And it's great! Keep going on this!
For first-time readers (and with higher Qi according to other reviews) this can be a very good novel. But readers with average Qi who are already well accustomed to this kind of portals + gamer system, this is an average novel, maybe even a little below that.I'm not a professional critic so don't expect a complex analysis from a Google translator user like me.I just found the novel in general average and the writing a little below average. It was not pleasant to read like many others we have out there.I want to make it clear that average is not a bad thing and I intend to continue reading this novel, that was just my honest review.Sorry for any erros, i used google translator.
i absolutley love how it's made and the charachters and stuff. I wanna know what happens to Mary , Cam , Renna and Johanna . Also, what happens to her friends? like, marry's friends.
Your talent is clear hun.... writing is definitely your calling???I enjoyed reading your chapters and I'm hoping to read more of your work???Great work Author!!!
5 star , for me............waiting for new update.,.,.,.,.,.,..,,..,.,.,.,..,.,,.,.,..,.,,..,.,,.,..,.,,..,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,..,.,...,.,.,..,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,.,..,,.............,,,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,,..,.,.
I don't want to bash you in, like the other guy did on his review. i know this is your first novel and your still improving but am gonna have to drop.Your mc is just way to annoying, i really did try and read more, but at this point am just skimming through chapters.(Mc problems)1: The fact the he actually paid for the wand that was disposable was just bad, he could have still made excuses or try to haggle over the wand, you think he would learn a thing or two over haggling because he grew in that type of environment, but no, He didn't.2: Some what the same problem, butcher guy was to ripping him off but as soon as he thought that the butcher guy was helping him with the girl, he dropped everything thing because he thought he was a "man of culture" for helping him with the girl.3: MOST ANNOYING PROBLEM OF THEM ALL! Annoying simp mc, Jesus Christ the first pretty girl that he meets he instantly goes monke mode for her, I can't imagine what would happen when he meets someone like a Princess or a Queen, that look more beautiful than her or some other higher being that's more beautiful.
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I'm really into your writing style. It's calm and clear, which makes the story much more understandable than stories that simply rush into action. It's very clear you've thought the storyline through. Also I'm a fan of Theo, he sounds totally adorable. ? My genre is romance, and I think that's what makes me like your writing more. You said on the Forum romance isn't your thing, but you do have a 'romantic' way of describing things sometimes. I like that, you paint a great picture of the world your characters live in.
This is one of those story where the MC is always getting humiliated and it is kind of annoying. Don't bother reading it if you don't want to be frustrated by the MC getting humiliated left and right.
Just an outstanding book, probably my favourite on the site it's just that good. The MC Ace is ridiculously smart and always makes everything go his way with his wits and money. Just a fabulous book. Recommended for sure!
This book shows the reality of life. You never really think of how those people living on the streets survive everyday. The story is well written and shows the struggles and the hope of a kid who wants a better life. Definitely a good read for a dose of reality.