It's not bad. The author has a grasp on storytelling, but the Asian "Brother Enzo" and "sister Ruby" in a supposedly Western setting gave me flashback icks. The English is a bit awkward, and there's the odd grammar mistake, but nothing dreadful.The world building is decent, but as others say, the interpersonal interactions don't feel natural. They are stiff.I had to laugh at the "uniform". What make a transparent plastic swimsuit a uniform? But somehow, it has a pouch to put things in? I mean other than what you would expect to find in a swimsuit "pouch
Although a bit early to say this. It should be a banger, upto this point it has been Great !! Hope for more, keep it up author ?. Wishing you the best :)
This popped up in my recommendations...after reading the reviews gave it a go. wow! I am at the edge of my seat, the main character particular planning and the way story lets us know what happened previously, while keeping us in the loop currently time. What can I say...I am loving it. it's refreshing to have author not be dramatic, or pointlessly lengthen a chapter to get to a point. I cannot wait to see how the story unfolds!
An enjoyable story and an interesting MC. Took a while to get into it but it was worth it in the end. Great Job
Best hip hop story here pls dont stop writing this.
It is a really nice story with very good character development. I love reading it please add more chapters as the story is getting interesting
The novel and to be honest , it's quite intriguing .
Quite an interesting story, I think so :()
the story is really good highly recommend it ?
Author is still new, and I advise him to use word to speech tools to proofread his work, it will really help him improve
Did the author forget to write chapters for this story?
Its good one, really piqued my interest in those- 'Arcana Cards'.World building is good ? and everything else is also fine.