"Chen's village was attacked by a hoard of shadows not to long before he came back home, killing everyone in the village." Isabelle said sadly " He told me the story in one of our therapy sessions. Ever since that incident he felt like he was trapped inside his body, not really being in full control it. That time when people went to the village, his body would just go on berserk killing all of them without mercy. It must have traumatized him not being able to take control of his own body. He also told me that, that memory doesn't even feel real, like his mind was playing games with him, almost driving him over the edge. While he was telling me the story it was like something wanted to burst out of him. Like caged beast wanting to freed from it's long imprisonment. I knew somehow it was serious but I would have never imagined that it would be this serious" Isabelle continued, blaming herself from what happened. If she just knew that this would happened, she could've found a way to stop it.
Writing quality, could use a simple spellchecker like Grammarly, it would take it a notch higher, Updates, seems stable,The story is rapidly changing every chapter, it's always on the move.As for character design, I personally would like more dialogue and inner thoughts.Background is great.
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This story is very good, to make it better, I recommend the author to imagine that he is the MC, imagining that he is in his own novel, you can do better descriptions of the battle scenes, etc, I recommend reading the novel ¨The Defeated Dragon'' can find it in novel updates, it is a novel where it seems that the author of truth is inside the novel, there is a lot of detail, he would not know how to describe it, although he advances slowly, it is enjoyable, maybe if he reads it give him some inspiration and write better his novel or make longer chapters, in another comment leave a great idea or suggestion to the author on how you can develop your novel.
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Well, decent story, I gave this story average of 3.8 * for this story... Well, I really like the concept and world-building of this story, the story is interesting and the characteristic of the character also strong, but here is the thing that bothers me and makes me less enjoy when reading this story1. The author really wants the misunderstand troupe of MC is weak from bystander continue, we'll I know it is to drive the plot but continuing it for a long time is annoying. Moreover the build-up each time when people offend the MC isn’t get paid by the conclusion, aka, the conclusion is not really satisfying...2. I know that the MC is a kind hero before, but how he reacts and doing something is really annoying, like what the purposes of hiding his identity when you literally always blurted out his identity as master... And the stupidity why he hides his strength...3. Less screentime of MC’s slice of life, I mean I am interested in this story because the title and the synopsis also tag make me want to read about MC slice of life as retired OP HERO... But his slice of life time is so little here, also what got us hooked about this genre, like face slapping etc isn’t included here, just like I said above, the author introduced many xianxia’s cliche arrogant character here, but the conclusion after they offending the MC is not satisfying.
It's an alright novel but it does scream arrogant mc. Like as soon as he transmigrates, he acts like a royal twat that is so prevalent in many other novels. Now I know why having a silver spoon start is so annoying since the mc doesn't accomplish **** but rely on his clans good name far too often. And people fucking compliment him for acting like a ruckhead. Stupid novel that has good cultivation and medicine if only the mc was more bearable.
Finally! I've been waiting or this series to start back up again. The MC is ruthless and he knows it and isn't like most Chinese MC who are ruthless but rationalize that they're not. He's not a hypocrite and does what he wants like Leylin from WMW. Everyone in this series is kind o twisted so it's really amusing.Thanks for picking up this series!
NO POTENTIAL JUST RUBBISHPATHETIC MC POOR PLOTTRASH SYSTEM........................................