I enjoy the use of onomatopoeias (words to describe noise) in the story. Especially since it’s a story filled with Action. It’s also nice that we get to learn about Sage as he goes about his day instead of using multiple pragraphy just describing.
I've been hooked to this book since I started reading it. HeroBrine is truly an undiscovered writer. .........................................
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This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
An OOOOOOOOP MCGodlike male that spread hormones and make females want to xxxx himSo far this is semi harem for me, there are lots of girls but mc xxxx them one by one after breaking up with other.Maybe in the future it'll become real harem when MC xxxx them at the same timeBtw it's a short and interesting novel hopes it'll translated fast
I have a habit of noting down Pros and Cons when I give a book review.So starting with the Pros:I definitely feel there is an interesting plot here. I was curious to see where the main storyline actually began. You have written a good summary as well. It made me want to read on to get to the actual plot of the book. I feel you have good setup for your lead character for his eventual character growth. Guy is at this worst point and struggles with his current lifestyle. It gave me the impression that he'll eventually grow out of that and I was intrigued as to find out how he would do so.Now for the cons:There are a large number of grammar and punctuation mistakes throughout your book. It was almost jarring to read some of the setences because of this. You have also used many words incorrectly. I found several instances where you have used certain words which have a completely different meaning that what you intended. I would strongly suggest to recheck your earlier chapters because the mistakes there are quite vast. Lastly, I found the first 4 chapters to be very slow. Not much happens. I understand you were trying to show the readers that Guy is living in very bad conditions but honestly, it's been dragged on way too long. I was looking forward to get to the actual plot but it was chapter after chapter of Guy hating his life. Felt unnecessary.Overall I feel the amounts of mistakes I found definitely hindered the experience for me. I do believe this story could be very interesting, judging by the summary. I wish there was more focus on the plot and less dragged out descriptions of Guy's lifestyle. I wish you all the best because you have potential for improvement. I'd really like to give it another read once you've made a couple of changes.
Not so bad the beginning, a little bit slow but maybe it’s good for the development of the character. The story it’s not original but maybe in the future it will be, a little bit repetitive.
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I think it's great that they chose those two garbage novels over this good one, just fantastic.I mean what's the point of even voting and buying trial chapters if they pick what they anyway?
Not very good compared to other sign in novels especially when looking at the power scaling of his cultivation, the setting's cultivation system and the frequency and quality of sign in rewards. Pretty much completely skipped 2 full realms only to then put a huge blockade to reach from the third to the fourth and just stall it out. A lot of irrelevant information, generally not very interesting since sign in rewards are hardly mentioned and the progress is so slow. wouldn't recommend.