"Jenna?" Jin asked with a tense voice. Why? Why does Jin feel hurts when Jenna feels sad? Pity? No, it's not pity. Jin was never one to feel pity for other people- he doesn't even feel pity for himself!
Although Chi had added seals that would instantly clean floors, walls, counters, tables, chairs, and other objects; a place like this needs staff to deal with laundry, making sure the lawn and gardens were maintained, taking account on supplies, and other numerous tasks that runes and seals could not do. It would require for her to actually hire people to create the staff, however Chi doubts that there would be anyone available who would want to work for a prince who was exiled.
He thought for a few seconds. The last couple minutes of his memory really WAS of a truck. A truck that swerved out of traffic and-
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Nice read. Need More!!!!!--------
- Excellent story and well-crafted world background that will keep everyone amazed as the events unfold.- Feel free to discuss the story with me and share any ideas you have about it.
The heroes will behave unnaturally. Within a few days, they change from young teens to war veterans with highly unnatural moral principles. The whole plot is strongly forced by the author, for some reason a single man is able to intimidate people to follow him and after a few chapters they are loyal as if they served together all their lives.I no longer mention the complete nonsense of the world technology and justifying the success of the plot armore hero.
One of my favorites in the slice-of-life genre. Great characterization, interesting story, in-depth and accurate looks at the entertainment industry.
The novel goes well at first. Later on MC is nonsense, his brain does not work, his behavior becomes an anime hero, he becomes a hypocrite, he plays the good person. My goals are as follows, he says what they do is different nonsense. I have never seen a smart, sensible MC who has such a trick. None of them use the potentials of the cheat. In the hands of someone like aizen or orachimaru we can see a really sensible trick.
Honestly, this might be my worst story. But hey, that’s ok. You see your mistakes and then you learn and adapt from them. Simple as that. Hopefully I can see this as a good learning experience and write something even better for you guys in the future!
A popular premise, but well-executed. There’s a few flaws I wanted to point out, in the hope to help you progress.Your grammar is passable, although I would personally refrain from using the passive voice as much as you do. It makes sentences clunky, vague and awkward. So if you can change the subject of the sentence in order to rewrite it in active voice without this changing your meaning, I advise you to do so.There is an absence of rhythm in your writing. I’m aware it isn’t easy to write with rhythm, and personally, I struggle with it as well, but try to bring some more rhythm to your paragraphs.The dialogue is clear, but sometimes it comes across a a bit forced. Overall, I believe your work holds a lot of potential. I wish you luck!
Best for summoners fiction!!But the bad thing is the update is so slow!We love ur story and need daily chap!!But well we got our Life to go on, so just keep update when you can