Interesting little gem that I stumbled across well worth a read. The author starts the story with a well crafted fight then seems to drop the mc into the deep end.
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What a novel this is, I love it and would recommend it to my friends. Great job Author excellent work and love the way you created your characters, they might be a few mistakes but that can be fixed and easily done with So I highly recommend this book good job ? ? ? ?
Hello, this is my first time onnthis platform reading a novel. I think the synopsis dosent meet the story as I have read. The story itself is good I liked it.
You really have a wide spectrum of imagination. To make up different scenarios of differing settings is truly a creative feat. It is amusing that the POV is like the narration of the readers, letting us be more intimate with the story. As always, grammatical errors are something that we have to take into account when writing. They can be easily corrected and will able you to have a better progression in your passages. Each scenarios can be a story on their own, that is provided. However, I do feel, as opposed to the other review, that the pacing is quite hurried? I don't really know how to word it, but yes, it feels like that. Also, in between dialogues, please put in a little bit of transition, so it wouldn't be as lengthy as it is now. Let the information flow out through the whole chapter instead of clumping them in one paragraph.All in all, this is a great test for imaginative people. It is exciting to read different worlds in each chapter! You are a great writer, so please continue writing! I'm gonna be cheering you on!
After reading the first chapter , I liked the flow in your story. The plot is also interesting and the characters development is also good. keep up your good work and I hope you will get a contract soon. Definitely recommend your story.
This has to be the one of the best novel I read this month. The comedy felt like he experimental log of the crazy lich. The filler are entertaining and interesting. The character are actually likable. There are so many reference in this novel. The Author have to be both a gamer and an anime fan to include all these reference. The world building are slow but you can interpret many things through the conversation because the person the main character talk to are very old. Also the stable translator thought
That futanari introduction was just stupid. I think the author purposefully wanted to nuke this book because how the hell can you start out so well to end up at an army of futanari out of nowhere
Sir Flow, I have read until chapter 5(included), so this review will be based on your first five chapters.Writing Quality;I didn't come across typing mistakes, but there were a few missing words. There were some unnecessarily wordy sentences, but I have never bothered myself with it when reading. I think sometimes even wordy sentences are necessary. You know better than me, sometimes who have to use that word, and your 'wordies' aren't smirking to the reader when reading. :)There are three more serious points in your chapters(Not in your writing quality).Chapters are toooo long. I picked a random chapter, copied it to the Microsoft word, and it said to me there were more than 2.5k words. That isn't actually a problem, but when combined with your too long paragraphs and unnecessary descriptions, it is deadly serious.With short paragraphs, readers will find it easier to read, and it will help retain them. Readers find novels via phone app and website. If you have large paragraphs, readers will find it harder to keep up/read.You are describing almost everything in a scene. You should categorize them under two subjects. The descriptions readers would care and wouldn't care.'Forcing myself to read' term comes from these mistakes in my opinion.Considering your writer carrier in Italy, and you having an editor, my rating for you is 3.5/5.Stability of updates;There is nothing to say. You released 86 chaps in just 94 days. It is a 5/5 in my book.Story development;In my opinion, this is the most complicated aspect of a novel when reviewing it. I have read only 5 chapters, some of the authors even reading less when reviewing. We can't know what will happen in the story. I mean we can be suddenly in a reverse corner in the face of an event in the stories development and everything before the event can gain meaning instantly.I'll only judge one point. Why did you put the flashback in the second chapter? And a long flashback at that. You could put it in a later chapter, or you could keep it ******. The sword picked up my interest in the first chapter, and puff! It disappeared in the second chapter. That's why I am giving you 4/5.Character design;Again it is early to judge with only reading 5 chapters. All I can say everything is looking normal in the first five chapters. As long as the characters don't have contradictions in their characters, it is ok. So, 4,5/5. I didn't give 5/5, because they aren't perfect.World background;Some things weren't clear enough, or I couldn't understand. Are they in a game? If not, is he aware of his system? Or is it everyone's system(like a shared interface)? How much mana does Helial have?These kinds of questions kept popping out in my mind. I won't be harsh about world background since it is early for an accurate judgment.3.5/5 for the world background.P.S; Story is good actually. After reading chap 5, I had the feeling that things will get lively. If the novel didn't have the negative points that I had talked about earlier in this review, I would read it, honestly, despite not having much time after me becoming an author in webnovel.One more thing, Sir Flow had said before, the original story has already reached more than 300 chapter count and it is number one web novel in Italy. I believe your current self is much different from the you from years ago. Keep up the good work :)
For this being my first Webnovel, It really sucked me in. It’s a great read, i like the detail that is put into the storyline. Please keep releasIng chapters, im hooked.
I dont like the way u making the mc look very idiot -,-________~^^~___________~^^~__________~^^~___________________~^^~___________~^^~__________~^^~___________
Thank you for the chapters Read this book on the other account its a great one hope you can Still Put Up more chapters ?