I had a whole proper review written out for this but decided to just backspace all of it away. I'm going to say what I want here, not as a review, but as advice.
Firstly, where's the synopsis? The only reason I clicked on this was that the title pretty much said it all, but without a decent synopsis, lots of people are just going to skim past it.
Your writing style is confusing and could use some work. The best advice I can give is for you to read some of the well-known stories on this platform and take note of how they do certain things, such as how exactly the character speak and what the follow-up text is for it, the rough estimate length of a paragraph, the background of characters, and so forth.
The formatting could use some work. The "paragraphs" are far too long.
Additional information should go to the additional information section, not in the middle of a chapter. That's the biggest problem of this story so far.
Work a bit more on the characters as well. Like, make a character sheet of every character and give them like 20 characteristics, traits, abilities, personality types, etc that make them unique. Don't introduce most of these traits into the story directly, but rather take a roundabout approach.
An example of a fairly well-structured paragraph with decent vocabulary that helps portray some of the characteristics of Zach:
'Despite Zach's prior fear when he learned about the foundation kidnapping him, a blooming sense of excitement welled up from his' depths after realizing where exactly he was; Inside of the very SCP Foundation that he respected!
The idea of being able to use his omniscient-like knowledge to explore The Foundation would have been a rather thrilling one if only the guards weren't holding him at gunpoint; His anxiety well on its way back to cloud his judgment once again.'
Other than those main pointers, there are a few things here and there that could use working on, but they aren't detrimental to the story. Just focus on getting a better writing style and fixing the formatting first.
~Some guy who cried after reading SCP-1762.
I like how Gravity Tales gave us 757 chapters without spending any thing to read them and on webnovel you have to spend 10+ spirit stones to read 1 chapter after that. Probably going to have to wait until next year for the chapters to get up to there to be open for free.
what do you people know?keep complaint do you know when the author of this book was 9 years old his one leg was running a business and the other leg was climbing hills to go to school.you people are dumb.compared to the author's achievement the mc is nothing. 8 years old and opened a stall,cook food,earn money absolutely nothing in Chinese standard he is at best average
An interesting concept... but maybe it won't escape from the clutches of cliches. as the MC goes stronger so does his arrogance, and Stupidity.
This is terrible. i had to stop after 5 chapters. everyone is very beautiful in this novel.
Another thing is one chapter it said thay his parents are working very hard to Help pay the achool fees but the next it says they have been dead for a few years and his sister is paying. its too hard to read
If you keep reading, the story will continue to be interesting that cannot be understood in one or two chapters, the ahead you read, the more interesting the story will be. In many places, I found unnecessary capitalization, along with many spelling mistakes that I pointed out.
But your dialogue is good. Even in many places, you have chosen the word very well. I had fun reading, keep it up.
Please
I love beast tamer and related novels, so yeah, though getting past Alice is stressful........................................................
your storytelling is absolutely awesome I was enjoying reading it, it's well detail and I loved how your description waiting for more good work
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Soooo, I think i just droped 25€ worth of Crystals on the Book and am now up to date. This Book hits a Sweetspot i didnt think i have. Fantasy/Sci-Fi with a lot of short but rich explanation of the World an its Weapons, with an awesom cast of main charakters. While some might not like the near op Protagonist, i think its well explained why he xan survive what he goes through.
What might annoy the most is the sentece structure: Example: As them it annoys them. Example end. It happens more often than you think.
All in all: Its an AWESOME ride and you should enjoy it!
**: I cant wait for the next chapter. please faster T_T
What the heck happened after chapter 78???? It was going great then the chapters just started repeating and a bunch of random letters all over the place? Someone please explain.