Really great cultivation story. The usual things that are present in cultivation stories that I can’t read such as terrible grammar aren’t a problem in this story. Can’t wait for more chapters!!
It's about a CEO got assassinated and got reincarnated in another world with a cheat system like 100 female cards with op powers!!! He can switch a character like in a game. I like this one!! It's totally a gem! Keep it up Author!
looks like a promising story read only 5 chapter like it so far
Good concept, but too many useless details added along with pointless info dumps. The story doesnt flow smoothly and a lot of dialouges are annoyinf or forced. Too much focus on small irrelavant details.
Welp, hello traveler. I welcome you to my first novel. I'm doing my absolute best to be consistent and I'm constantly improving( or so I hope... )This novel, is my first experiment, and if you can bear with my first 2 chapters , you might even enjoy your time.I have this first arc drawn out, and I think it might even be kinda good...Also, if you care... could you tell me why you stopped by, or why my book captivated you enough to click on it? this would just help me understand what yall want!lots of love for checking me out❤?
Kage no Jutsu, you gotta read this. The writing style is somewhat complicated to follow through, but it's story covers up for it. A masterpiece indeed.
I find the book really interesting and goodHope the author updates the book as soon a possible
It has a very detailed start and the story line gives the sense and feel of the environment he is currently in. And the background of the character was also good unlike how in other manhuas etc
A good mix of action, emotion, and suspense. Liberty is a strong lead character, and her motivations feel genuine. The plot is interesting, though some twists are easier to see coming. It's a solid read that holds your attention, especially if you’re into stories about uncovering hidden truths.
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Bro!! I just read some chaps, and I have to say, I’m really impressed! The characters felt so real like I could actually meet them in real life. You’ve done an amazing job of bringing out their emotions and struggles in a totally relatable way. The story had me hooked—I kept wanting to know what would happen next! Your writing is so natural and effortless, it made it really easy to lose myself in the world you’ve created. I can’t wait to see what you come up with next!
I’m giving you five stars—not for the quality of the work itself, but in recognition of your dedication and perseverance in reaching +200 chapters. That’s a rare achievement and a testament to your commitment to writing. However, after reading 20 chapters, I found several major issues that made it difficult for me to continue. These are key areas you should focus on improving in your future works.1 Pacing and Narrative DepthThe story progresses too quickly without delving deeply into the characters or their backgrounds. This makes it hard for readers to connect with them emotionally or understand their motivations. Characters need time and space to develop organically within the narrative.2 The Main CharacterThe protagonist comes across as overly simplistic and naive—traits that feel out of place for an adult character. To make your main character more compelling, consider the following:Ensure they have a mature and critical outlook on the world around them.Give them a charismatic presence—one of the easiest ways to achieve this is by incorporating wit and sarcasm into their dialogue.Establish a clear goal from the beginning, rooted in their backstory. Ideally, a tragic past can serve as a strong driving force.3 Writing Style and ReadabilityThe formatting of chapters and writing style currently make it difficult to fully immerse in the story. It feels as if the story is targeted at a younger audience or non-native English readers. To improve, work on enhancing descriptions, enriching the language, and avoiding oversimplification.4 WorldbuildingYou can simplify worldbuilding by drawing inspiration from well-known fictional worlds (Westeros from Game of Thrones, Avatar, Harry Potter, Made in Abyss), then reshaping them into something uniquely your own. However, it’s crucial to introduce world elements gradually through the protagonist’s observations or interactions with supporting characters rather than dumping all the information at once.5- Plot and Story StructureBuilding a strong plot can be one of the most challenging aspects of writing, but as a beginner, you can approach it similarly to worldbuilding—by merging elements from different stories into something fresh. For example, you could take the world of Lord of the Mysteries, remove the church system, replace it with magic guilds, introduce magical towers and dungeons, and give the cities a more technologically advanced feel. You could also introduce a "land abandoned by the gods," transforming it into a "dark continent" that serves as the source of all evil. The story could revolve around the protagonist and their team trying to prevent entities from this continent from breaching the barrier protecting the human world.FinalDespite these criticisms, I can see that you have the passion and dedication necessary to improve. With time and effort, your writing will evolve. Focus on deepening character development, refining your style, and strengthening your plot, and you’ll eventually be able to craft a truly exceptional story.