Would rate it higher but not much in 20 chapters! My standards may be low but all I want is a story that can keep my attention! If it catches my eye I rate them on if I think this story could grow! So I think this story has potential but see where it can fall off quickly!
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The book is good and I can see that this author is inexperienced but kudos to you for at least starting something and hope you keep up the good work ????
Another loli novel. I'm outta here. ??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
It is a very generic novel, the author at least in the first phase did not bother to explain things, he was simply writing superficially and quickly, in my opinion there was a lack of writing with more details and explanations, as it took only 2 chapters and the MC he goes from an ordinary human who planned the death of his parents and committed suicide (he was aware of his luck, money and escape were possible) to a great powerful magician. I reading, but it is more out of false hope that the author leaves aside worn clichés and a little attention to detail and originality.
Mmm.Personally, I don't think this is a great novel.I don't like the personality of the protagonist, he's a liiiittle bit... how do I say this. He sounds like he's written by an author who isn't really socially adjusted. Reading the first few chapters, it definitely seems like the case. A cashier won't ignore you just because you're a country bumpkin or a nerd, they may just be having a bad day, or they aren't big on customer service. And I don't know a single person who thinks it's loser-ish to spend a day watching movies, as not everyone is a party-holic. What I'm trying to say is, the protagonist is way too thin-skinned, and has too much of an inferior complex. The characters thus don't feel too realistic. It tries to insert a comedic undertone, but the humor's just kind of flat. I just really don't know anyone who finds quirky comebacks that are inserted everywhere, funny. Also, the writing style is very *******. Too much "!!!" and ALL CAPS, among other things. Emphasis is done in all the wrong ways. If you want to emphasize a character's emotions, pour everything into descriptive adjectives.It's not completely bad, compared to some of the fanfictions on this site, along with some of the female protagonist romance novels, but you can't say it's good either, especially since there are actually some really good works on this site.Overall: 3.4 starsWriting Quality: 3 starsStability of Updates: 5 starsStory Development: 3 starsCharacter Design: 2 starsWorld Background: 4 stars
as your fellow countrymen im very proud(lol) i hope this book gets top 1,I love this book btw. Grabe mag English dko na alam sasabihin hahahabasta support lang ako dito.Good luck sayo!
Hey the story is going really good. I want to see how he deals with with Fang Yuan. Please don't stop and keep going. I have added your story to my reading. Please update more chapters. Can't wait.