The story had a lot of potential but unfortunately its been ruined. The author tried making the conversations smart, sassy, funny and mature but he totally overdid it. Many conversations are stretched out for no reason as well.
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The plot and the characters of the story are great. The protagonist is developing really well. I love that there is a bit of horror and at the same time it is funny also. Please continue the translation.
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This is my unbiased view and is probably really pessimistic as my cynical cold hearted bastard side that is not tied down with useless things such as love will review it but here goes.The first few chapters will probably be just readable as the wording is awkward and doesn’t flow this is it is the authors first time writing and hadn’t gotten a natural style it improves as it goes along.Stability of updates is questionable in the authors defense he does value real life over writing since I’m not getting paid but that’s besides the point it may take awhile but unless clearly stated chapters will come.World building is what the author likes to think as learning with the view point. it’s vague but slowly grows as the protagonist excperiences things.Story development is a journey there is a main “goal” So to speak but it is generally over shadow by immediate concerns and desires that lead to said goal. Character development is hit and miss since this is the authors first published novel.Character design is in the wind so to speak whilst the author tries his best and thinks he gets his idea of the character across the truth is he struggles with the proper wording for the human anatomy especially faces.And that concludes my un biased thoughts on this brain child whilst I may be blinded by love for this pice of work I am not arrogant enough to claim it has no faults so please read and enjoy my novel and if you do see faults point them out as I will strive to Improve.
It doesn't have a deep character development and it's fast paced but nonetheless I liked it in it's own way so keep the good work.And work on your English more you need that.
Good terminologies with real like situations. Pls keep updating the story. The author has done some real research and knows about the SF community in detail
So far so good. Author if you didn't let the readers know, I really wouldn't have known that this is your first time writing in english. Though there are little mistakes, but as a author myself I know that those mistakes can slip by without you knowing. So over all good job. As for the storyline, I'm not one to read war&military fiction much, but I really enjoy that your novel is an easy read. Just wish you make the chapters a little longer. Keep up the good work, look forward to what happens to Madd(MC).
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Its a really good read but I have one question and that is when are you going to post the next chapter because it's been 2 months and I really want to see how the story progresses