The story is truly touching and quite relatable, being awaken from a fake utopia is my type of plot after all. Although I've seen lots of stories of this theme, this one's unique in its own way. The characters are portrayed to be realistic, as well as their actions but reading it is very entertaining.So, the writing quality is well and decent but I believe there are still room for improvement (purely from a reader's pov, I'm not a professional writer either). I suggest you add more descriptions to the dialogues or describe the current scenario in a more detailed manner, to aid with the reader's visualization. There were some grammatical errors but that's totally fine and does not get in the way of understanding the story (I myself commit that most of the time lmao but too lazy to check them), proof reading is the key, YAS. All in all, the slice of life genre was given justice to and that's a big thumbs up! The story development is good and I am looking forward to how it will progress further. Keep it up!
Honestly terrible. There is no depth to characters so far. MC is just a face slappibg machine. All he does is slap faces and scheme. The face slaps are not executed particularly well either, and he doesnt seem to make the disciples in the lower plane. It seems like he already has them
It's a pretty amazing xianxia for such a common name "Tempered Immortal". It's basically A Record of A Mortal's Journey in another universe.
Okay, so this novel is worth your time, at least it was for me because it made me smile and laugh a little in many days.So writing quality is good, I have no problem imagining the situations, Although there are he and she word got mixed up in the sentence but not much.I am at ch 57, the story has developed is good.
Editor and proofreader sorely needed. Reads like a second or third draft, not a finished one. Fortunately the writing is usually clear enough to mentally rewrite as I read so the riveting story doesn't get bogged down by it. The character reveals are well paced and development is clear in both the characters and the story. Lots of surprise twists mixed in with a natural progression of the plot. All in all, a story worth throwing most of my free passes at while saving my coins up to deal with cliffhangers and insatiable curiosity moments (lots of those, I admit). A story well worth many hours of my attention, and hopefully yours as well. {^θ^}
It is a great story and I enjoyed reading it.
But the updating stability needs to improve.
i like the story so far, so am gonna give it 5 star to support it, also if anyone knows the raw novel please send me a link.............................
What I love about this novel is the interaction between MC and Heaven, unlike other fantasy novels were MC is trying to kill Heaven for reason unknown
One of the best books that I have read! Firstly, the world building is made to be reminiscent of real world issues. This allows for the stories to be relatable for some, and draw attention to actual problems. The character depth is also very good. It makes the characters interesting individuals, rather than mindless cardboard cutouts as well as keeping them emotionally compelling.
This novel is so good. I don’t know how it isn’t higher on the power rankings. This novel is such a cool fantasy and is so easy to get immersed into. It has a lot of different fantasy aspects and merges them all excellently. Read it.
The story has a great potential. It's an interesting plot and the stability of updates is impressive. I saw that in the last part of every chapter, there is a set date on when you will update the next episode, and for me, it's a good idea. Great start author!
Wow, I'm blown away. I couldn't put it down! From the first chapter, it captivated me. It's we'll written, and the mystery is enticing. I'd recommend this to any mystery fan!