The plot line is really unique. Your writing style is good too, it's direct and clear. But I would suggest you to split some sentences and separate them because they tend to become too wordy and sometimes a bit confusing. Apart from that, it's a really interesting read. Keep up the good work!
Starts of with an interesting premise but sadly disappoints and fails to deliver. The MC has little character development and is honestly quite boring. The main problem is the translation or the source material is badly written with many errors and Inconsistencies effectively ruining any sense of immersion you might have had.
This is a comedy. Our MC is an idiot pure and simple. He is always off doing something that eventually gets him into trouble. This is more of a slice of life, and is to be read just for kicks.