Have you had any regrets of not telling someone your feelings. Have it occurred to you that words could have made a difference if only it was spoken. Moments are best cherished as it becomes memories. "Actions speaks louder than word, but actions without words can be confusing" a kind friend had once said. This is a story about 5 individuals who came from different dimension and planets who was brought to one another by fate, wishes and a promises. I hope you enjoy reading the story.
Good read, I like the Mc and his harem a lot but hope the harem doesn’t grow to big. Can’t wait to see how the story progresses and how the Mc will evolve.
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Since there is only seven chapters, there isn't much to go off on. However, the MC is quite funny and the writing is good. I just hope to see more scenes of the MC and the ML together.
This is good novel. I liked it. The author has put too much efforts in this novel. I'll appreciate this novel heartly. Make sure to update new chapters regularly ??.. . I'll surely recommend this novel.keep it up ??
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I had to drop this at chapter four. The book may get better but, it is asking little much when you devote an entire chapter to (This new game is a secret from everyone) and then immediately follow it with (at 20 minutes since the game launched thousands of players logged in and ""guilds"" were exclaiming wow at our MC).As of chapter 4 the main character had only bought the game 3 and a half hours ago, and only had one hour and a half of play time. For a game where the CEO is pissed that one person may know he wants to sell something, you can't suddenly throw in guilds and a thriving intake money to teal money system over a three hour period. I am sorry, you put a hard short timeframe for the main characters actions and then ignored it for everything else. It takes time for a game system.that costs thousands of dollars per unit to sell. It takes advertising for ANYone to buy it. A second chance book can be good. But this one trips over itself trying to show how OP the second chance is too fast at a cost.
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Good writing, good characters ,good grammar ,good plot good description I live this novel, I love it so much, I highly recommend it ,good job Author excellent work I love this ? ????