The story was intriguing, mixing family rivalry and temptation themes. The characters had depth, but some parts felt slow. It's worth a read if you like supernatural drama.
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horrible writing quality, the story is full of bumps, everything seems to happen simultaneously.
Well. First things first, the grammar could use some work. It is readable, although I can't deny that it hurts my eyes and this is coming from a brasilian writer who also struggles with english grammar! The main plot also seems to be initially just your everyday typical VR novel although it quickly switched to the stereotype reincarnation with a system. The MC just seems to be one of those dumbasses and probably he is gonna end up just like those clichê protagonists. For the good points, although the grammar is pretty bad I can't say it's the worst I've ever seen since I saw things that could make anyone feel the desire to drink bleach and put clorox on their eyes, so congrats because your novel is nowhere near close those garbages. Despite this story being quite my cup of tea I can say this author has a lot of potential for future growth so I'm looking forward to your future stories. Everyone needs to start somewhere, even the first chapters of my first novel are also pretty bad.Sorry for being harsh on the review but I decided to be honest here, it is going to surely help you in the future.
from the beginning you can see this book has potential everything is breathtaking and makes me wonder what's going to happen next, definitely a must read!
It is pretty interesting by the first two chapters...I hope savagebookworm will upload the next few chapters too :) I really like horror stuff so I am eager to read the next chapter ?
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I love this story so muchI love all the arcs so far and the different circumstances and behaviors of all the hostsPlease come back from hiatusBut seriously thanks for this story
This story is very good . I like it very much
what the heck is with these preview chapters, there is a huge chunk of info missing and it is annoying.you miss so much information, so you need to try and fix it.
MC is stupid, it could be good except that he focuses on brain and directly improves brain power. MC is way OP. never met anything that is a challenge.The writing is barely readable and in some cases needs a few seconds of interpretation after reading a sentence.I give up on this book
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