If Grammer mistakes don't throw you off a story then you are in for a treat, unfortunately the Grammer will not be better and trust me I read the latest free chapter and still no improvements. So, I'm not giving my SS for the later chapters. If author is reading this then please add use grammerly. It helps detect and fix a bunch of Grammer problems.
Where to start? This story is the perfect example of a good thing gone bad. The concept made sense but the execution was poor. Mc is not smart, he does not prioritize getting stronger. You know how there are MC's that try to create their own trump cards or develop their powerful skills?? This dude is nothing like that. He simply relies on his abilities as a parasite to see him throughHis character is inconsistent. Sometimes he is pointlessly wicked, sometimes he is pointlessly saintly. There is no criteria that links his different behaviours other than the fact that his treatment of a person usually vastly differs if they have a pvssy between their legs. I think the author was going for an anti-hero MC but failed miserably.He also lacks substance. He has no greater goal or objective outside of exploring and no greater motivation to explore. Despite his past experiences with betrayal, he falls in love within the first 20 chapters with someone he knows next to nothing about. Both factors make it very hard to care about him.There is no overarching theme holding his character together, no essence. Lith in Supreme Magus is a pessimistic psychopath who does not trust people because of past betrayals. Essence. Anthony in Chrysalis is a broken person who finds solace in an ant family and fights for its prosperity bc it gives him the warmth that a dysfunctional family and terrible childhood denied him. Essence. Even fvcking Goku from Dragon ball is a battle maniac who will stop at nothing to get stronger primarily bc nothing gets his wood harder in the morning than a brawl against a strong opponent. ESSENCE. This MC has NO essence whatsoever.Do not get me started on the side characters. Virtually all of them are fluff set pieces with no backstory or no motivation, simply there to help MC or advance the plotline. Most of the villains are the generic, cause-trouble-because-I-want-to, attack-MC-to-show-he-is-stronger types whose motivations and reasoning are unclear or not mentioned. I'm 85 chapters in and still can't tell you why villain A from 40 chapters ago did what he did.Then there's the repetition. The author tends to say the same thing in different ways in the same paragraph and then repeat that same thing in later chapters. You do not need a whole paragraph to say that a character is shy. And if she was shy 10 chapters ago, she's probably still shy this chapter. We get it.The world is developed to a small extent. Monster classes, dungeons, how skills develop, even how many moons there are in the fvcking sky, these things are not explained. We have to guess. The author also makes alot of spelling and grammatical errors, they really aren't bad enough for the novel to be unreadable and I don't think the author is a native English speaker so frankly it doesn't actually matter to me. Just thought it may be useful to know. Honestly, this whole novel reads like a first draft. The author clearly has talent and sensible ideas but his writing is very much immature. It feels like he didn't have an underlying plan for the MC's or story's development, didn't think too much about the depth of the characters either. I love novels with concepts like this one (skill and stat absorption, beast summoning, op mc, you know the works) which is why I toughed out 85 chapters but I do NOT recommend to anyone. I will drop it for now and if I ever pick it again, I'll review after I've read a bit more but so far, I haven't been satisfied much less impressed.
I'm writing this review after reading chapter 24, I believe is a chapter that would make various readers drop the novel so this review might help you all to understand why would someone would drop it.Let's go with the facts and then I would give the author a proper critic;-MC: It's has been told to the readers he was a member of Special Ops, if any of you were members of the military or are active members, then you'll find along the story this statement can't be possible. Not only the main character makes poor choices, but his actions in a alien environment without any back up and a system that he doesn't know how it works(nor the author bother explaining and detailing), puts himself in various scenarios a situation that even I, a former corporal of the army, wouldn't make in his situation. Personally I believe that the job of an author is to make a research beforehand in the subject that his work might go around, to prevent this kind of things happening, more so when the author himself is gaining money out of it. It's our job to ensure that we are writing something that does make sense within the boundaries that we stablish. Yet this novel lacks of the aforementioned.-System: The system in this novel doesn't only is almost irrelevant, but counterproductive to the novel itself. You see, it works as the mainly provider for the MC to get his hand at some arsenal, however, I don't know what the author was thinking since the way the system has been presented to the readers is awful. There's no explanation of how it works, details of the weapons and how the character might be able to get them, nor anything. What's worse, the main character itself doesn't bother(or hasn't been show and explain to the reader) to gain knowledge of it and how to use it on his favor, worse yet, it is conveniently overlooked for the author's own choice to be that way, since he could ensure his personal view on how the story should unfold.With these two I believe is enough for any reader to put off from keeping reading this work.Now for the author, the problem with your story is that for the reader, is clear how you wanted to reach certain points of the story, overlooking not only your characters, but world building at that. The flow of the story feels weird and hollow, at every moment I was reading the chapters I felt there was so much for the main character to do and think about before doing what was explain in the story, that I found myself unable to invest in the story completely.The actions and choices made from the MC doesn't make sense from a point of view of someone on his position. Nor does the choices you make willingly as an author for the direction of the story itself. I don't know if the novel improve in later chapters, since I thought it was necessary to make this review based on the first 24 chapters.I don't know what else to say at the moment so I'll leave at that.
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I'll be direct.Love the work, don't understand why it doesn't have more views, want more of these kinds of novels.So many people who are writing "reborn in a new world with a system" have ****ty grammar, nonsensical wish fulfilment storylines and stupid plot developments. I dont understand why they have 10s or 100s of times more views than this.Now, with my rant out of the way, I'll give my grade to boost the novels rating as a straight 5, and give some of my selfish opinionated thoughts. I have only read somewhat after ch70, but in my self entitled opinion, that is enough to judge.Writing quality - Hey, it's real English. Meaning there are no typos or stupid grammar or horribly translated, out of context sentences. And oh my god thank you for no repeating, overused and unimaginative descriptions like "it was like the difference between heaven and earth".Story development - Somewhat irregular, but not in a bad way. The important parts that you want to read are well detailed and narrated. The combat, the encounters, character interactions etc.The tedious things like battle aftermath or uneventful traning are sorted out in a few paragraphs.Character design - Interesting, strong(personality), and loveable characters. Or hateable depends on what floats ur boat.The speech patterns between the character are easily recognisable and consistent.World background - Didn't get much of it so far, but what I did, I liked.Introduced Countries/kingdoms/empires seem interesting and promising, and the world seems to slowly be coming alive.I still don't have any idea about the world's geography, like the amount of continents, world size or climate for that matter(other than it seems to constantly be cold. Maybe its winter idunno). But hey, neither do most Americans about earth(Ha). No offense, just stereotypeing.Overall, quite an enjoyable read and much more deserving than most of the trash on the top charts, and with better writing quality. Save a few.Hey, I said that I'd be direct, not quick.
Need more ch ... they will drop book ........ dont want that .......................... keep going plz ch ...........nine................................
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I.just happen to read the first page......hope it will be an interesting story........with happy ending .......................................
this novel is so good..this novel is so good..this novel is so good..please continue to translate this novel..please continue to translate this novel..please continue to translate this novel..
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This is very good novel.As its name suggests it's about a mortals journey to immortality.this novel is medium pace novel it's not too fast nor too slow.the world background is very good.
Good and exciting development but need to be updated more frequently.Thanks for the great work waiting for more updates ?????????.