its good to see that the update has resumed again! after a couple months of waiting it has finally resumed! looking forward to a much more faster and stable updates! keep up the good work author-san!
This is genius.J'adore ce roman, c'est bien écrit, les personnages sont bien développés : je veux juste connaître la suite ! Je ne sais plus quoi marquer, mais il faut que je remplisse le barème des 140 caractères.
the kind of adventure i am searching 4!!give this novel a chance! i vouch for this!der are two ML and i am loving both! the two is pretty unique
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AS LONG AS THE AUTHOR IS THE DEVIL PARAGON. WE READERS ARE ALREADY GRATEFUL AND BLESSED TO HAVE YOU HERE. I ALREADY LOVE YOUR PREVIOUS WORKS, NOW IT SEEMS I HAVE TO ADD ONE IN MY LIBRARY
So, the writing problem is the 2nd of two problems that forced me to leave the "chat". My google translator tries very hard, but the translation comes out terrible, I mean that the edited text is translated very well. Please understand and forgive my pain) The first and main problem is in the narrative thread, it is like an electrocardiogram in a sick person. Jumps from side to side, like in that cartoon. I seem to understand everything, but if I get distracted for a second, I will never remember what this passage is about ...Thank you, this is a rare case when I was not very upset about the time spent. Finished at chapter 78.
Review:This is one of the best books I've read so far since 2017 .Great MC and detailed plot, simple to understand terms and great sense of humour.Simply the best
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'Bang—Beep…beep…beep…' That defibrillator shock. That moment when the monitor went flat and then came back. I literally gasped out loud. The author wrote this scene with such clinical precision that I felt like I was standing in the ER myself. 'Each press made a faint cracking sound from her bones, along with his own rapid breathing. Sweat dripped onto the blue sheets and into his eyes—he didn't have time to wipe it.' This is the highest stakes moment in the entire passage and it's over in three paragraphs. Yun Shu, who we've seen struggling with a suitcase, getting dizzy in the sun, crying over oily takeout food—suddenly she's fighting for her life and nobody can help her except this stranger in black. The system's panic is what really sold it for me. 'Meowed frantically, jumping on her face, but Yun Shu didn't respond.' A being that can talk telepathically, that can transform (sort of), that has favor point systems and star-faring technology—completely useless in this moment. All it could do was watch. That helplessness is terrifying. And the taxi driver! This random man who could've just driven away when she collapsed—he called the hospital ahead of time. 'Hey, hey, hey, wake up…' He was scared too. 'It was the middle of the night—terrifying—but she couldn't die in his car.' Darkly funny but also deeply human. He didn't have to help. He did. What are the stakes here? On the surface: Yun Shu might die. Simple as that. She has congenital heart disease, she's alone in a new city, she has no family, and her body is failing. But underneath that—the stakes are about connection. She's spent her whole life being avoided, and now the person who saves her is this mysterious stranger who won't even tell her his name. The tension of 'who is he and why does he keep appearing in my life' is already pulling me forward. The author also sets up future conflict beautifully. The nurses gossiping about Shi Muchuan's ex-girlfriend. The fact that he's 'closed off his heart.' Yun Shu, who has literally no one, meeting a man who has chosen isolation. Both of them are emotionally unavailable in different ways. How do they learn to trust each other? That's the real suspense—not whether she'll survive this episode (we know she will), but whether she'll ever let someone close enough to help her again. And the system! It's stuck as a kitten because its energy is low. What happens when it runs out of energy completely? Can it disappear? These are ticking clocks the author hasn't even fully revealed yet. I'm already worried about things that haven't happened. That's good writing.
I have read the raws till they were last updated and I do like it. It is quite an interesting novel. The ML is a study maniac with a system and the FL is a study goddess who doesn't need one. In the beginning I found the FL to be somewhat annoying but later on she became quite cute. She is introverted but not completely and is very much obsessed with space. Mostly because of her mother. Of course there are times when I still find her annoying.Maybe it's because she is the kind of person I personally dislike though. There was this time when she studied in secret while making MC think she was not feeling well. MC was the poor gullible idiot who always share his notes and study materials with her. He did find out and was somewhat angry for a time and did defeat her in that exam. She is also not someone who accepts failure well.The ML is also somewhat like this but only to her mostly because always rubbed it in his face when she came first. Even then he quickly got over it and studied even harder. I also find her lack of communication skills to be somewhat irritating. It maybe a product of her upbringing and some people may even find it cute. But I would rather she speak directly about what she wants. I hate it when people never get to the point and I have to guess what they mean. The ML in the beginning considers the FL to be his rival(now also) but their relationship changes through the story. They are at the 'everything they are together but they are not but want to be' stage. But neither of them is willing to admit it first. One thing I don't like about the MC is his overt dependence on the heroine. He loses interest in things she doesn't like and works best when together. Now it is a mutually beneficial relationship most of the time but sometimes MC gets the short end of the stick. There was this time MC came second in an exam because he got distracted by her. Now while this is more realistic since teenagers are mostly ruled by hormones it is somewhat irritating when you read it. Maybe it's just me.... Anyway the situation resolved itself. One thing I found somewhat ridiculous is the aerospace arc. It seemed slightly unreal.
At first it's quiet boring especially the way he thinks is quiet perverted. And knowing that the MC want to make a harem of his own, I wanted to stop reading this (Cause I don't like harems) The time span of the story is already in 21st century and at this time Polygamy is not legal and stuff. So I think that this story potential will be degraded because of it. I rest my case and hoping that author-sama will read this review and realize that this will be hard to continue if our MC will pursue his Harem. Anyway, based on the story it progress in a normal way. Not so fast and not that slow. It's great that our MC is focusing only to Irene of Red Velvet. Though he's shameless and very flirty, its quite cute in that way cause you could get to know him better. And looking forward to more updates to come author-sama. ?
raw? give me the name or the link pleahse ............................................................................................