It is an excellent novel, but I believe there are some points to be improved. Most of your audience has the maturity to understand that the world is not just black and white, you don't need to have a moral advantage in every dispute. There is no need to create second-rate villains to justify the MC attitudes, we understand that human beings are complex beings, we are selfish and ambitious, we always want more, the MC enemies are people who want more for their family or people, not necessarily stupid and 'evil', I'm not defending them, they should all be killed with their families, I just ask that you don't insult my intelligence. Another point I noticed is the absence of harem etiquette, I'm not asking to go out collecting pokemons, but looking at the pragmatic side, most alliances at that time are through marriage, especially someone who wants to be emperor, accepting concubines.
I liked the idea of a modern Exorcist so I decided to give this Novel a try but it started going towards a downward spiral the ML is supposedly powerful but and strong bus has a weird submissivenes to her husband because if his yang energy which seems very forced and make the story loose its flow, then most of plot was just so annoying at some point because I could never understand why she was did somethings.
I hardly comment on novels bit this is just so sad because I felt this had more potential.
Honestly there are much worse novels in higher positions.It's perfect? no, some things about the protagonist, especially at the beginning, made me want to strangle him, however the writing and the sense of the world were noticeably improving, thanks also to a basis that, if it's true, didn't invent anything new, and it's also true that it didn't it lacked everything it needed to have a lot of potential.I hope the author doesn't let himself be demoralized by idiots who comment without even reading the work itself. At least this is what I seem to have perceived.The material is good and honestly those who only know how to criticize will hardly ever achieve anything, especially if such criticism is not constructive.
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A very interesting novel. I would recommend it to all readers. It is different, and has a unique way of capturing the minds of the readers. All the best for the author, and keep up the good work
The story is fine, has a bit of a dark vibe, but nothing too emo. 50 to 70 percent of each mini chapter is a massive stats spam.Its causing me to dislike the story a lot. There's no point reading this if you don't binge read it from start to finish. The chapters are too small to be interesting or memorable by themselves, so you won't remember what the story was like with a new update, the chapters are just too short to allow for such reorientation.So whilst the story is interesting on the whole, I dont recommend reading it untill it's fully released or changes the chapter sizes to not primarily reach a word count through an often times irrelevant and unchanged stats spam.I honestly recommend the author to post like 1500 words at a min., and up to to 2500 words per chapter minus stats.That's what the wn guidelines recommend for contests as well.
Feels kind of like the legendary mechanic with the quest giving in a medieval setting. The novel is pretty good MC is born talented and with a golden spoon
I’m writing this before I start reading but from the previous book I have read by the author the quality of this book will be outstanding. I hope that people will check out his other book after reading this one.
REVIEWNarration: Decent and immersiveWorldbuilding: Vast and detailedCharacter development: Nice and steadyCharacter design: OutstandingDialogues: Realistic and LifelikePacing: Not fast nor too slowWriting quality: MagnificentExecution of the Genre: Good pitchStory potential: HighUpdating Stability: SteadyMESSAGEI am deeply happy that the author joined spirity. As it has the potential to win! With more exposure, this will become great and even reach a million views! Or anime adaptation even a movie! Kudos on your work and See you in December (if you know what I mean) ?
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