Living in your own creation, I love that. The book is a good one and I'm looking forward to seeing it become a good book.
I really love this story. The characters, the dinamic between them plus the action is awesome. The only small issue i have with it it's the inconsistent pacing(sometimes is too fast like jumping events plus one aabrupt timeskip while other Times is so slow that it feels like You could sometimes jump one or 2 chapters and barely see any discontinuity with the story)
This is a Thrilling book, the characters are well portrayed and the writing style is very good. I recommend it to everyone.
If it comes from this author it’s pretty much guaranteed to be great. Take a change on this or any of this other books and you will have a great time. Thanks for the new novel author, your other business one was also really good
trash... just trash...
The writing is fun and vivid, the progression in levels and skills is consistent, with each accounted for.Its plot structure and characters, the personalities, and everything, they click.Yes, they click. 10 outta 10, and better than other factory-produced creatures that pervade this place.Happy reading. Happy writing.
Ok I am gonna give it straightFirst 30 chapters almost garbage from a readers perspective Are they important to the story? Yes very important. They set an important framework for the whole story. The story after that is quite enjoyable, I binge read all the way until I caught up with the story.The reason I have such disdain for the first 30 chapters is that, we as the readers have no context , who is Ryan? Asmodius? What blessing? Who is the girl? Why every girl wants to hit Ryan?I really wished I had clear info abt this story construction from the synopsis. Also the synopsis dosent really cover the actual of the story at all.Good thing abt the story is that the writing quality is pretty decent, unless there is major info dump. There is enough intrigue to hook the reader. I concept of the book is quite intresting.Some problems I would say are that there are too many characters introduced too early and at once. As a result everyone has a shallow personality. Currently only 2 people in the story have a proper personality: Ryan and Arian. Other than everyone else is superficial. Also this is clearly not a villain novel yet, bad marketing is never good.Some recommendations(you know best author, these are just personal opinions)More slice of life chapters: like mc and Selenea went on a ‘date’. You could have taken this aspect slow. Give us more perspective on what he is feeling which walking with her, them asking questions about each other. Maybe it will actually give an idea why Ryan started falling in love with Selena cause all I see is he got forced to say she is is gf, she bullied him into going places, she life when he complements her.Another thing I would say is add a few filler chapters, this adds on to the Slice of life aspect. Like mc talking abt the sword he got or a chapter abt him finding out that the fairy is enslaved by the earring. I am just saying the story does not need to go from one bug event to the next. You can slow down a bit and build the world.Also dial down the annoyingness of the mc. He has experience of 20+ years due to his 2 life’s. He dosent need to act childish or immature when talking with every single character.I would also appreciate chapter from other chapters pov(not too many but enough to give an idea)Again I am not saying the story is bad. I am just saying it is not refined enough to reach his full potential.
I’m a new light novel writer, and this is my first attempt at a Love/Romance novel titled "Heart of Cherry Blossoms". I may not know everything about writing yet, but I poured my heart into this story. I truly hope you enjoy it! ~~ o(￣▽￣)ブ
not bad...........................
bravo...am only gonna say one thingUNIQUE???
mc reveals the system to few people.I dropped.
Unlike other fanfics, author isn't messing up with old incidents. Main character has some really overpowered abilities that can be used for his goals. This was a great read. Author should keep it up