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good story and yeah the story is really good
This story is fantastic, I’ve fallen for it.
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[This is brutally honest] Lemme just start this off by saying that Jae Hyun is a SERIOUS Marty Stu (genderbent Mary Sue). I mean, could you do any more godmodding with this dude? He's apparently handsome, intelligent, and is generally flawless, according to the story. You wouldn't want to mess with him in a battle either, even though he has no prior training apart from martial arts!For all of the other characters however, I am IN LOVE with them. They're all so diverse and make for the perfect friend group, not specifically for Jae but just in general. The only complaint I have about the rest of the group is that WHO GIVES SOMEONE NAMED DANIEL THE NICKNAME "Niel"?! Why not a more commonly accepted nickname like "Dan"? I mean, I get that it's a different world and all but come on dude...I'm in love with the setting, like, CAN I STEAL YOUR IDEA OP?! The idea is very well developed and I'd love to learn more about this society. About the story development, however, I'm a bit confused. Wasn't this about Jae Hyun finding his place in a world where music is essentially illegal? What's with all of the underground gang rapes and committing suicide? I suppose this could be an outlet of inspiration for Jae Hyun in the future, but doesn't he already have enough inspiration? He's in an oppressive world he doesn't know and misses his family. I think that was a bit of a cheap trick OP, using sensitive topics to build your plot. Just work with what Jae Hyun has and focus on the main point of this novel.Again, I don't know how light novels work but these are just my opinions as an avid reader and aspiring author. In general I really love this work because it's a refreshing break from the heavy novels I usually read. Kudos to you OP.
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Pls update soon!! Cant wait to read next chapter....................................................................................................
1. I got a dig bick 2. You that read wrong 3. You read it wrong also 4. You checked 5. You smiled 7. You are wondering why you still reading this8. You see the mistake right? (on7)10. But did you see I skipped number 6?10. You checked 11. And saw I doubled number 10 and skipped number 913. And did you see I skipped number 2 14. You got tricked 15. But did you see that I skipped number 12 16. You checked and wandered why am I wasting my time on this.( You got tricked )
This book is really good. The plot is unique. The writing quality is pretty good. Also, I can see that the updates are stable. Of course, we need more chapters author! Keep up the good work!Story development, character design, and the world background are definitely amazing.I wish you the best of luck author!
NOTE THIS IS A CONSTRUCTIVE FEEDBACK REVIEW AND PROBABLY DOES NOT RELATE TO CURRENT STATE OF NOVEL*I am not coming back to update the rating*Ok, first of all you need to make your paragraphs smaller. You want your paragraphs as small as possible and seperate it by each time a new thought is started. There were litterally paragraphs covering my full screen on my phone, was worse than last review.You need to read your chapters more before you publish them btw, you are missing some commas, and errors you didn't fix like first page ., You had that. For commas, you can try speaking out loud or in your mind SLOWER that way you can catch the pauses.You need to put commas for but and and (most cases for and). Try to make some of your sentences shorter too. No reader wants to read a sentence that 5 lines long (on my phone). If you must make super long sentences, only do it like once a chapter.Put a space after your ..... and also you cant out commas after that ......, You don't need to capitalize if you are still continuing the sentence, just delete the comma though if you are using that.For things you aren't sure are right EVEN A LITTLE BIT just search what you wrote in google. like allright neesa a space.Try not to use all caps a lot. Its rarely used ib writing for a reason, as it does not fit in almost all circumstances. If you use all caps, you should only use it for one line paragraphs, which willmostly be a scent, noise, etc. PAINNNN, AGHHH, BLOODDDD, etc.Might be wrong about this, but I think lied is used wrongly (I think). For words that have the same sound to another meaning, ALL WAYS LOOK IT UP, too double check. Even if I'm wrong on that word, you should still do it.Try to desribe 5 senses and emotions more too btw. The characters felt too 2D and unrealistic in their actions. Like parents seemed like they didn't care one bit other than the conversation. For example you can write "A air of gloom surrounded the table, his mom's eyes were souless, his dad started to be out of shape, growing stubs of facial hair." Make it more relatable.Also this part is opinionated, but I feel you should change the synopsis a little bit. I just don't get the phrase, 'she was his ideal', like he loved her? He idoled her? idk don't get it.I honestly couldn't read after C1 as I already wrote so much... I just skimmed C2 sorry couldn't finish it..Because of this I made story development a 4 to not be biased as I haven't read enough. I marked 2 for updates as its not haitus but the speed is way too slow.
A mind twisting novel on causal paradoxes and timeloops across universes. Also, a little bit of romance, heavy on the philosophy and physics.... a fascinating read.Grab your popcorn.