I just noticed it got the pregnancy tag...
Understand your words, they said he "looks" 30 or older so his age isn't 30 up just his looks meaning even though his real age is 24 but he looks like someone who is 30 yrs old or older. Understand?
Chapter 41, no formatting, no line spaces or breaks in between sentences/paragraphs.
i wanna read more, it seems like a good story.
the chars are really good so far.
i've read much worse on here.
give it ago its worth a read.
the beginning is really bored ?,...............................,.................
I saw sport genre and instantly hooked! Author please publish more and more❤️?
The plot is interesting. The characters' interactions are well made and coherent with how the relation between male and female are in that world. I want to know more about the other empires/power and if any man is trying to build a revolution army or something like that with what happens to them when they lose the war.
The character got so bad I just couldn't keep reading, especially since that fairy came he just became so dumb. Why did he become such a wimp?
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHHAHA IN MY LIFE I NEVER LAUGH THIS BEFORE HAHAHAHA WHEN I READ IN CHAPTER 2 HAHAHAHA BANQUET YOUR HEAD BROOO HAHAHAHA ????????????????????????
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in the first chapter it wasn't very promising at all, but when i read it and read it it starts to get interesting the story is amazing as it progresses but the writing makes it hard to understand.
Really interesting concepts and set up.Seems like the story has a few too many ideas that are kinda competing with one another while trying to establish what the plot will be about. I keeps things interesting but also a little unfocused. I feel like the pacing goes a tad too fast at times with too many characters being introduced, too many things happening, and too many rules about how this world works being established one after another.Probably my advice would be trying to espace out the events a bit and focus more on smaller things like character detail. We get things like time travel, aliens, people coming back from the dead, robbery... But I find it hard to get invested cause I feel like I know so little about these people. The dialog also doesn't help. Everyone talks so much but it's mostly exposition explaining what's going on and what they're doing. Dialogs that sometimes go on for gigantic paragraphs. Meanwhile, the actual events like kidnapping a baby only last for a short while. I feel there is a need for people to say less and do more, and allow the reader to learn more from those actions .