The story had potential but the author made all the characters brain dead. In the battle against the unicorn riders the so called elite troops, the MC fights against them, and kills most of them by simply blocking their vision and stabbing them and their Elite troops? Even if they couldn't personal defend themselves, your telling me that the don't have the teamwork necessary to block an attack for their comrade?And as an army commander, you believed that an ordinary soldier fought off elven troops that almost killed your entire squad, walked away practically unharmed and you don't suspect anything?And now the elven princess, she told her enemy when her soldiers would attack, (putting aside the fact that our MC readily believed her), and has the power to talk to MC from like another dimension but can't even defend herself when the MC rushes her? It makes no sense that whoever taught her magic didn't even teach she common spells like magic shield and magic missile
I'm enjoying the novel ngl?. buh the updating tho ? it's tiring to wait so long
This is good, I enjoying the story. Hopefully author is on good health and can continue but it is alright if you want to take a break. Anyway nice story man.
Not good. Very weird. Read it and see for yourself. The plot is strange and the writing is odd. We get a ton of system novels, but the premise of this one is just odd.
How could I not give this story five stars?! this is incredibly written. I felt like I was really there, becoming entranced in the story. if you're looking for a novel written like a professional, then this is it people! just read the first chapter and you'll be hooked!Keep it up author.
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the book is a slow start so far I'm 18 chapter in and I'm enjoying it and hope it gets better and better. the main character seems interesting and some of the support character do also . so I'm hoping for some action soon
Excellent dream world with a gaming theme. I am thrilled to read this book. Pacing is cool. The storytelling method is simple and attractive. Waiting for next chapters...
Before I get to reviewing this, let me preface this by saying that I still thoroughly enjoy reading this despite the brain-cells I lost. Now on to my review.TLDRvery nice story, with subpar writing and characters but is excellent for passing time. 1: Writing Quality: Let us be honest, the writing is garbage. The author jumps between tenses constantly and uses the same phrases over and over again. This sort of writing makes the story bland and often messes with my immersion. I would suggest the author to go and get an editor to help him proofread the writing. I don't mean this as an insult to the author, I very much like the premise of the story and I would love to see it executed well, writing-wise. 2: Stability of Updates: Not much to be said here, as I am not fully caught up. 3: Story Development: I love the pacing of the story. It very much complements the "War & Military" aspect of the story. I love Kingdom Building stories and I like when they are executed well. Plot wise and Pace wise, the author is doing a great job. 4: Character Design: I had this at 3 stars before but now I made it 2 simply because there is no one character in this story that is unique. I know this what you typically expect of a cultivation novel, but that should never excuse the author of falling into the same troupes. All, and I mean literally every last one of them including the MC, is one dimensional. Side characters that have no brain of their own: check, FL that is cold and strong at first, but turns into an extension of the MC with absolutely nothing to add: check, an ambitious MC that... you get the idea. Character Interactions: This is a part of character design, however it is highly dependant on how well the author designs the characters personalities and such. So when you have all the same looking characters you get the same character interactions at every turn. MC meets someone new, said person disrespects him, mc says or does something, said person is amazed. and just repeat the process. 5:World Background: The world has a very nice premise. It has been perfectly illustrated thus far. The rules of the world have also been stated, which means the various power dynamics are clear and make sense. This sets the stage for a very nice kingdom building developments. Nicely done.To be honest I wouldn't have written this review if I didn't believe in the potential of this story. And to the author, if you are reading this I would like to say the following. This is your story and as the author/ creative mind behind it. You have every write to explore. Don't bind yourself to the troupes and limits that have been set. Explore with your writing, experiment with the characters. Make them awfully cruel, kind, brave and cowards. Or a mix of all of these, because one characteristic can never describe a human being otherwise they turn into caricatures. Try to make the world move even if the MC didn't exist, cus right now it doesn't feel like that. All I want to say is, experiment and go wild with it. All the best.
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I will put 5 stars to enourage the author, i like this GENRE SO FUCKING MUCH, after IRAS died i really wanted a novel wit this theme, but its always dropped.