I'm currently only ten chapters in, but I've already noticed some patterns that could be improved, especially in terms of writing quality. The big one for me is heavy use of passive voice eg: this character did instead of character said... Using a lot of existance verbs: did, was, is, will. I know the author isn't a native English speaker (I think) and this is a bit more nuanced then general English, but if he cut this out then his writing could be much better.This story isn't particularly unique, but it is still captivating and I'm enjoying it quite a lot. The main character is super generic, but it's still fun to read. A few of the author notes acknowledge his silly ideas and generic plot points, and to paraphrase him- what does it matter as long as it's awesome. I like this philosophy, and feel like this goes against the grain of other authors on this site who get mired down trying to explain away why their ideas aren't stupid.This authors strength lies in the fact that he gives enough detail to feel emersed and not so much that you stop feeling emersed. This author clearly has room for improvement but is definitely worth the read.
Thank you for the chapter author! I hope the issue with your keyboard would soon be solve, so that you can write and we can read!
"Bleiz, do we have any storage item where we can use as a container for the materials that was newly discovered?" Adam asked.
As Jacob continues to munch on his popcorn, he occasionally looks at the beautiful dots of light in the vast darkness that surrounds them.
The two continued to bicker while the scene below moved on
"Target is moving, I repeat, the target is moving." One of the ten men looking at Yi Long spoke.
- "Activate the Pangolin System!"- ordered Ackbar- "Also... contact Takodana Forces!"
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I love Nocturnia so much. More OC i love OC I want everyone to make more original characters. I have absolute no clue what Lyra or her family looks like please add aspects on how people look so i can have a visual idea
"Be patient and keep an eye out for Maria's Guild, eventually they will have to make their move" Master Egor said, feeling very smug as he bids his time to finally get his chance in destroying Maria"
Very good story but would like faster chapter update please ????????????????????????? I liked the story ????????????????????
Hi, Sand Kastle here!? (Shamelessly rating my book 5 stars since I like it)Are you looking for a story with an unlimited level-up system that will allow an underdog to evolve into an overpowered figure in the idol industry? If yes, then, this story's for you!