Amazing novel and I love the fact that things build up to the point where he gets betrayed. If you can tolerate ntr then this novel is practically a godsend. Good job dude.
Somewhat interesting, but terrible execution.The entire game makes no sense. It’s ruined by pay to win elements such as: 1) most powerful characters require absurd amounts of money to play and free characters can never surpass them; 2) costs absurd amounts of money to revive (‘free’ characters cost $2 per level, and it only goes up exponentially depending on the grade or type of character); 3) literally everything in the game costs money. Want to revive your ally? Cha-ching! Open your own dungeon? Cha-ching!Not to mention the fact that a level 48 character (one of the highest in the game) is unable to take on more than 5 level 10-15 characters in the starting area even though their gear is significantly better.A three skeleton boss can’t even take on a one star hero healer and a two star tank with a few randoms, yet apparently the game is balanced.Essentially, the game makes no sense, and everything is one dimensional. Whether something is strong or not depends on what suits the author’s plot.
honestly I love the story, I wish more of the story got continued. the whole setup and plot is amazing. totally recommend reading tho it does cur off
Hi! This is kera, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail.
Not a shameless author here. It's probably very early for a review but since I have nothing to do, I might as well write this. Also, I want to make things clear. If you go into "see who voted" and see my profile, understand that it's not that I'm shameless. I was scrolling down my novel page in admiration for my work when a guy voted, I got too excited and pressed the "vote". I know it's a minor issue but still.Coming to the novel, I like to think that it's flawless but as an author as well as a reader I know it's not. The writing being one of the biggest flaws (which I'm trying to improve). Regarding the world-building, I believe it's more or less okay. If it appears bad, then it can only be attributed my not-okay writing. Understanding reader's dissatisfaction with main characters, I made the MC. He isn't a Gary Stu but he will get the job done. There are several social norms I would talk about in a sarcastic way. They are not to be taken seriously. Everything else is subjective. You like it? Good. You don't like it? Not good but I understand.
Hope Martha was okay but author, I like how descriptive you are on the story. And knowing its horror and thriller, I likeee it. :))) This book has potential. Keep writing :))