Clarity your writing needs Clarity. You have major show vs tell problems. Your dialogue needs work too. Trust me I've been there practice engaging the senses and inner thought and the story will shine
An amazing story with an active community around it and a cool person for an author,what else can ask for?Art? They have that too,not just cover art,character art for several characters that appear in the story,and more is being made.Read it you'l love it.
Nice plot, interesting synopsis and world-building. this novel captivated my attention. It has a good storyline… very interesting. Good Job author. Looking forward to more updates.
This story has serious potential to going premium and I'm shocked not many people read this yet give it a shot since it's free it'll give the author a reason to keep writing this hidden gem
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I barely read FL because some people tend to make the female weak and all about romance so I am glad you did not make her weak. There are some grammar mistakes and remember that periods and question marks go inside dialogue not outside of it. I like the characters interactions, it is lighthearted and fun. Your story is very insteresting and knows to keep a person reading. Keep up the good work!
The book is pretty good but it's hard to understand some paragraphs. Like the other say it need more world building and character development. I feel that the book is written without proof reading it.the author just put what's in his mind without connection to the previuse paragraph. Basically the story event happen without explaination. It needs to be proof read and change some words that the westerner to understand.
Petition to bring back Warlock Apprentice and my own little piece of advice: don't pay even a cent to WebNovel, because the novel which you like will most likely be dropped later, after WN thinks it can earn more money from another story. If you pay, it means you support their policy.
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It's fucking great ,goch i can't wait for that fight maybe zane will eat pluto's brain after killing him.its fucking cool men you aee good i got say i never expected The story to turn this much.
Anyone who want to write a story about a OP MC should learn from this man. more than than 100 chapters and the story never get boring.........................................................................................................................................
The story is well developed and plenty of world building. The only downside is all of the information dump, which can cause one to quickly lose enthusiasm for the novel.