while slow it is by far one of the best chat group stories i have read love your work keep it up :) only thing i could hope for is a faster realease but as a writer myself understand both how hard and potentialy unhealthy that is but none the less love you work :)
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LOABA spends far too much time in the inkstone discord. Imagine how many chapters per day he could write if he didn't waste all his time there. You should read this web serial and let LOABA know with a comment on every chapter to spend less time derping and more time writing. Thank you. Skully out.
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Just wanted to let you know that you’re book is for sale on kindle under a different name and has already been read and reviewed by multiple people. I don’t know if someone just copy pasted your work or if you upload it under a different name but someone is making a profit of of your story.
Not a bad rating just came here to say that couldn’t get past chapter one because the cringe and second hand embarrassment.
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As I wish to deliver on the request of being entirely brutally honest, I must say that this review may appear rather negative. I focused mainly on what - in my best opinion- has the most need or potential for improvement (in the hope to help you progress rather than simply sing you praise).The very start of your story has the potential to be immersive, but fails to grasp my attention. I think this is due to the fact that there is an absence of rhythm in your writing, something I noticed as well further throughout the rest of your work.The characters feel sympathetic but I fail to imagine them. They appear to be cut out of cardboard and don’t feel like actual people. You have given me some idea on how they look but I would like to know more about the way they stand, their posture, their bearing.I want to see more personality. Give me some originality. Give me some flaws! Dimples, scars, dry lips. Do they pick their nails? Play with their sleeves? Show me peculiar character details. Any particular violence, abruptness or charm in the way they move? A particular way they move their eyebrows? Do they make exaggerated hand motions when they talk? Nonchalant scratching? Do they look away at some points during discussions? Do their smiles reach their eyes?As your reader, these things tell me a lot more about the characters than the colour of their hair. I wish for texture, intensity and sensation.The dialogue is fairly woody; it sounds forced and not quite genuine. As for the romance; it is a bit entertaining, but it does not thoroughly convince me and the ‘chemistry’ seems obligatory. I am not especially rooting for the relationship, although as a reader I need to get a secondhand infatuation with the love interest.The overall quality of your grammar is rather poor, but not as poor as other works on webnovel. I do appreciate that you clearly put a lot of effort in your work. I applaud your enthusiasm and sincerely hope that my harshness did not dissuade you from continuing.
First off, I'm finally dropping this novel because this chapter ends with the second time the MC gets sucked into a spatial crack and separated from everyone.That's not to say that that's not the only bad thing about it. It has more plotholes than it has... anything else, really. The biggest one is obviously the MC. He could literally have all types of beasts (or even unlimited, dunno what the author plans to keep, the type limitation mentioned in the beginning or the unlimited version shown by the memory fragment simulation), but no, somehow a handful of strong-ish beasts is better than thousands of average ones.Then there are the knowledge gaps. At the beginning, no one knows about the human/demon deal, until they magically do. Same with the continents, no one seems to know his original continent, until they magically all do.Then there's the current big bad in an undersea castle, who can apparently divine any and all information it wants, including the location of the MC's group, but for some reason doesn't just send people to either capture or kill them.Seriously, the whole story is riddled with plotholes and sidetracking.
Story soubds interesting but sadly its MTL that is not edited . Its really ruins the story. Mc meets new Ppl first they are 2 Women and later 1 . He leaves his sister behind at home and later she is at his new sect. It is really a Pain.
Translator can we make this fast? You can increase the payment for i dont care i just want to read this