Hope everyone of you enjoy the story so far. I hope you can leave a review or message so I know how to improve the story and the writing. Have fun reading!
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This is a very interesting start. The setting is amazing I love it when humanity is close to losing. The characters are vibrant and unique, it's really hard not to picture them while they talk and interact with each other. Even with the small lore dump in CH 5 where the author introduces many characters the story doesn't miss a beat in its delivery. And the simple way it's written helps a lot to read without getting tired]
The story starts off all right the grammer is not the best and the flow is not great either. The MC has no talent in magic and becomes an aura user which is a nice change of pace. And then it is all ruined when the author gives a system to the MC. Yea completely ruined it for me and the thing was the MC was progressing fine and was actually a very talented aura user. So the author had no need to have a system.
Good start to an interesting idea, and it’s good up to about 3/4 of the story, then it goes downhill unfortunately. A genetically engineered soldier from a technological culture crashes on a magical world. Isekai scenario. He uses his advanced technology to defeat the various magic things, and the magic system gets a pretty good explanation. He then proceeds to hack the magical system, although that isnt developed as much as it could be. So far so good, but then the story progresses and I won’t spoil it for you, but the main problem is that the remaining 1/3 of the book feels rushed and ideas are not developed but instead just happen at a breakneck pace. My biggest issue though is that the ending is a real bummer, which is a logical way to end the story, but again feels rushed and doesnt do the story or character any justice. What a disappointing end to a good start.
The concept is a unique one and from the title my guess is that MC will be a puppeteer/necromancer? This alone has gotten me hooked and from how far I've read the author writing is great. Am looking to read on this story as it's quite interesting.
I absolutely recommend this novel to everyone. It is one of my favourite novels and even though the plot starts a bit slow, if you keep reading few more chapters, you will realize it is definitely worth reading! The characters are well characterized an what makes this novel so interesting is the fact that it mix game elements with cultivation world elements.
Saya sangat suka novel ini, jangan sampai berehmti seperti baisiea jancook, semoga penulis sehat selalu dan dapat membuat novel ini sampai akhir, teri.ma kasih banyak bos, telah menulis novel ini Lanjutkan
I've had it with these Chinese nationalist scum. China may or may not be a good country, but some of its people need to be rehabilitated.Sick of this sh*te.
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this time i get to be the cool guy who tells you the raw Name you are looking for !!!! 天赋拉满的我，下次还填非常简单