This is a great read. New concept. Great plotting skills. Immersive narration and creative use of powers.
P.S. If I was the mc I would have asked the best use of the power.
Well, you caught me off guard when 'Indoneaia' Name came up, I proud of my country. but anyway I like the storyline and where it's going. Keep it up man [img=update][img=update]
Omg omg omg.. first one that I have felt that it warranted a review!! Please add more chapters!!! This cant be the end! It's just the beginning!! Please!!!
Hello.
First of all, this story is not written by you. It is a popular story form India, written by Chetan Bhagat. If you want to spread the story, you should first get permission from the author & 2nd you should mention the name & give credits to the author. If you want to write a Fan-fiction, it's wrong pattern as well, as you just copying & pasting the original work. I implore you to either mention & give credit to the original author, or remove what you have uploaded here. It is a punishable offense & you could get sued by the author.
Regards.
Very thought out story, the characters are all interesting and there is no grammatical or spelling errors that I can spot. Keep up the good work!
Three phrases: I lost the sense of Time, my mind was fresh and relaxing when I read, The world is immersive and the system of cultivation is wonderful.
I have nothing to say but three words, it's just art
There is No chapters currently. but this might be good. Hope it doesn’t disappoint.
The only flaw this story has is its translation.
I like the characters especially Ron his personality matches mine and if he was real we would be best friends
This is really a great story, the flow of the story is also good, wording could use some improvement but other than that everything is great, I definitely recommend this one.
This book and background was well written, I fell in love with start to finish. It had me on the edge of my seat mos of the time ?????????