While cultivating he's unable to control his body and the system can just do whatever, which apparently includes raping some random poor girl. I'll lose faith in the readers on this app if this gets chosen.
Good Really like the MC Du Chan
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Filled with small mistakes to the point it's glaring right in the face of reader.From the update dates it appears that Author either posted this novel somewhere else before, made a rewrite(unlikely) or wrote for himself and finally decided to try out by posting it here, as such the update are haphazard at best.The background took unnecessarily too long amounting to mostly filler.Story progression makes little sense.Characters are very two dimensional and I might be wrong, but to me a quite a few characters are evil solely for the sake of being such rather than due to some deeper reasoning.The world background seem to be on a backburner as it appears that author is more interested in keeping whatever story he has in mind going full speed rather than slow down and think from the perspective of a third party such as the reader, leaving most of his thoughts about the story and world as simply that - Thoughts!
Not bad but far from perfect. I like "!!!" and "???" their chemistry is good. You have some grammar mistakes. There is a lack of description of the looks of the characters and setting. Paints a pretty foggy picture in the reader's mind. Keep writing and improving!
has the author considered passive abilites or effect powered by mana which would lend sognificant power if the effects were able to be stacked( keep up the chaps u cen do it!!!!!!!)
The story is hard to follow. If you miss a single word the entire chapter becomes confusing with how dense the writing is. Don't get me wrong, the story idea and the story itself is pretty good, but there's just a few things that I don't like. I'm picky when it comes to stories.
WOW! SCI-FIC MY FAOVRITE.I loved this book.It is written so well and great. The plot is so thrilling that it hooks you more and more.Excelling mc.This book should be read by allGREAT WORK AUTHORGOOD LUCK
This is a review of chapter 1 since that is all that is currently out. I didn't know what to expect going into this. But in the end, I came out satisfied. From an enjoyment point of view, I think this story has a lot of potential right off the bat. I am curious to see how the two will grow their relationship. And I NEED to know more about what lies in the astral state. Those entities are set up to be great threats so you better bring out their full horror!From a grammatical point of view. I think it's nearly perfect as is. The only thing I could be picky about is some small grammar points like punctuation and spelling. Some words could've also been used better but it still is fully comprehensible. I think proofreading once or twice will make this the best up-and-coming story!
This book is a must read the mystery behind the main character as he lied to not only us and the characters in the story but himself, his Character is well written along with other characters like my boy Renji and my girl Suzune it's a perfect five bro must read
I've read the first two chapters. The premise is interesting and not something I've seen before.Lots of potential but whether it will fully achieve it is to see.Anyway a good read.
The world’s really interesting, I love the mystery of it, and the mist gives a legitimate reason for the protagonist to be so indefferent. Unlike other novels where he just seems edgy. I also like how the author handles the overpoweredness of the MC. Finally, his ruthlessness is great, I find it annoying when the protagonists never kill or just let their enemies go away just to give the author reasons to make higher realm enemies target him. This story also give the much needed situational awareness that so many enemies lack in cultivation novels, like when the elders of the demon lands clan banished his ancestor for targeting the protagonist I was extremely surprised.Keep it up author!