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Saying so, his thumb brushed over the same section that he'd kissed on her palm before pulling her up and towards him. Qiu Yue knew, but she simply let herself he pulled towards him.
[You have Level up]
John turned away from them.
We grabbed some foods and then proceeded to the center table. It's like this table is designated for us.
What the f*ck even is this novel? What rotting novel hellhole did they fish this out of? You can find much better world building in twilight fan fiction, so I suggest you go there.
Congratulations for makin it too 300ch...
Okay - so how do I say this nicely? This story sucks. Don't take me wrong - I mean, it's a good story with okay characters, but MAAAN, there's a LOT of inconsistencies and plot holes. I mean really - a ton of stuff where the author just changes tune on a whim. Just to give you a few examples;Early on in the story, the MC has a crush on the principal, and then suddenly the author mentions that the MC will take the principal on a date, but without the dialogue ever having taken place. Yes, this is just a benign example, but it gets worse later on, for example, in the latter end of the story, the author does away with the cultivation scheme that the reader is used to and suddenly introduces "levels".In my opinion, the author is a classic example of not having a clear structure of their world, history, and the characters in it. You will often find contradictory statements in chapter to chapter - and this is just one of many problems with the story.To be nice, the author does have nice character development and relationships. The MC doesn't just fall for the main love interest straight away but falls the friend, and through loss and hardships, realizes his feelings for the main girl - really nice, which is something that many other Chinese novels fail in. But this doesn't make up for what should be the concrete fundamentals of every story - CONSISTENCY!This story will definitely offer you a fresh take on a MC which isn't completely ignorant of his feeling. No face slapping or arrogant young masters at every turn with okay story progression. If you get hung up on details such as plot details and the author contradicting himself, then you should stay FAR away.Overall, I read up to chapter 500+ before skimming the rest of the chapters due to getting fed up with these points. The story end nice, however, as much as this story may portray itself as a single love interest, in the last 50 chapters, the MC suddenly gets himself a harem - also one of the things which will throw off a lot of its ******** readers.Final statement; it really feels like a story written by 2 or 3 different authors, with too many different cultivation methods, contradictory statements and views, vague/confusing races (e.g. Ivantians - which are apparently people who live on the Moon, and Kaedians (which I still don't who are or where they came from)). So yea, although, I'm generally forgiving in nature, this story just felt like a downright mess. It entertained me the first 100 chapters, but after that, I slowly got more and more fed up with it.
I highly recommend this novel as I finished the novel in English. Slow as the pace is at the very beginning, the story has a impressive strucuture and the magic world is well constructed. Expecting more chapters!
lovely trough and through still love this novel and more importantly my Alice
overall, this story is an intriguing one, the writing is top notch although, still needs a bit of improvement, still it's a wonderful book . Good job author!?
Quite a pleasant read so far, despite the occasional rough spots in the gramar and spelling. They are not so jarring that they break me out of my focus on the story. I am enjoying the way in which the MC is being developed, and his evolving personality is fleshed out. I'm hoping to see it done the secondary characters that are prominent enough to deserve it. So, a hearty 'Good Job' to the author and your reward is to keep working hard to develop and keep improving the story. ?
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