OMG this storyline sounds A-AMAZING, and soo exciting!
YES and yes. I like this a lot. Zad is the goat and uhh... [Inster filler] [Inster filler] [Inster filler] [Inster filler] [Inster filler] [Inster filler] [Inster filler] [Inster filler] [Inster filler]
It's bland. Wow. MC GETS TO CHECK IN TWICE FROM TWO BLOODLINES! SO OP! SO GREAT! It's really important as his check-in ability is limited? Not really. It doesn't really matter. He checks in every now and then. It's basically overpowered MC without comedy or real motivation to exist...
I'm ****ting here. haha
Iam dropping this book because I don’t get enough rating and cheers hard for me to translate works with out readers supporting it............
The way you started with your story is quite interesting - it makes people want to keep reading to see what happens next. This is a good romance book! Keep up the good work Author!
There were minor punctuation and spelling errors here and there.
Plotwise, the story is intriguing and fascinating. I love how you portrayed the MC as a character who prioritises his family's safety above himself.
I hope he manages to survive and somehow protect those he holds dear in those trying time.
*For punctuations, if you have already used "...?!" then there isn't much need to put a comma behind the sentence unless its a phrase or dialog.
There were some errors as well where you used "your" instead of "you're". You're basically means you are... or something while your is used to symbolise something belongs to you.
Same goes with the word "his" and "he's" that you wanted to use.
This are just pointers for you, because I really enjoyed the story.
What can I say? The author mass released 122 chapters in one go which is even more than many dropped novels have on WN. Worth the read and the story is also good.
I liked it very much. It was fun and enjoyable reading this. Unlike other novels this novel is more about fun with a solid plot. When you are bored after a hard day, this is what you should read to relax yourself.
As a bonus you can directly contact the author and curse him few times to vent out your frustration. He won't mind. [img=recommend]
Interesting novel. More Unique compared to other novels I have read in trial read……………………………………….…………………………………………………………………………………………………………..
Pros:- I love the tamer theme for the story- I also like reading about people being stuck in a VR and like someone said early this is inquie being that he has his brother with him.Cons:- I already started disliking the concept after he recieved the Slim Gloves but was willing to look past it until he literally caught the final evolution to the beast he already has smh.- Hate the black egg Item he recieved right after getting an op gloves like wasnt that enough.
i like this book even though the genre isn't my taste. The author had done a great job to make me want to know more and read it. so I hope the author will keep writing