I definitely think you could improve in some areas.As said in other reviews, the grammar is quite poor but you can't be blamed for this as this site isn't exactly made for English stories, rather translations and for people who are attempting to start grasping the English language, which is difficult, mind you! I do love the idea of the story, I really do, so keep up with that! Character design is a little bland but I feel if that can be improved in later chapters and or by adding in some more descriptions in earlier chapters, say if you were to go back and review them.Overall, 3/5! This isn't bad at all! Really good start, and I'm excited to see where this'll go!Let me know if you'd like me to go through the first 10 chapters, for instance, and give them a pass-over to make the style better fit for English readers! Free of charge, of course!
It's a good story, I am quite eager to read more of it. Keep it up!ajfanvgjbxivbgaeouhgwipandgvsohgdvsHIIRTUEHGVSPIHVGWSJFB'VIHSRGIWipdgvo;ahug'rdthnb;idht'stabhjod'hrie'og;rsdnthine'othbisrdtnh'bsridjth'ndth'edt'bziteds
..... you forgot to put bl/yaoi tag.... oh god my eyesssasssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss need to bleach it.........................................................
......Seems like it has potentntial.....??................................................................................................
If a power trip had a child with another power trip, and that baby itself had a power trip, that would be about this story. Pure power trip, no intelligence. It’d still a fun read for a bit, but gets tiring
Don't be fooled by the 4 &5 stars reviews.The story is trash, full of plotholes for the sake of plot, 0 proofread, its worse than the usual trial read. Don't waste your braincells on this.
Apparently, this is my most popular story, so here it is! I wanted to try exploring the concept of a returned hero. I mean, aren't they like veteran soldiers returning from active duty with the possibility of having PTSD? It's a bit different from the norm as I tried to base the dilmena's such a person may face and all the comedic situations in between. Please enjoy!
Author keeps typing he or she makes it very annoying and hard to read
it's a nice story with a very wonderful development . and though I've not read through everything yet, it think the story will turn out good. I recommend .
great writing so far. cool modern day setting. keep it up. i love system novels. cannot think enough for 140 characters jfkdkdkdkkdkdkdkdkkdkdkdkdkdkskskzisi
Overall a new take on the mc getting a trashy class and becoming op and so far I like it a lot and really hope it is picked
This novel is such a nice read. The translators sometimes mistype some characters or other names such as Dark Dragon to Black Dragon, Black Rock to Black Stone etc. I think it needs more reviewing before the chapter is published.