Honored to be part of the proofreading team lol youre gonna do great.book seems pretty decent so far, cant wait for more insights into the cultivation system. Also mei ling seems like a nice love interest
The syntax is awful. The diction is super repetitive. The author can’t decide whether they want to write in third person or first. The logic behind some of the scenes is just so stupid and forced. Author does a good job with being super descriptive and allowing you to imagine the scenes in your mind as you read but it doesn’t rlly work with the other issues constantly breaking your immersion. I was going to read all the free chapters but couldn’t make it past chapter 6. Wouldn’t recommend.
Ah, so far, the book is alright; the writing is fine, the story is developing, but slowly, the character designs are alright, and the main character is just a normal smart boy with potential (who knows, maybe he'll get better later). It is advised for readers with a lot of patience, but even though it seems unexceptional, this book has a lot of potential if there is character development.
It looks interesting due to the sheer absurdity of the premise.
Well the writing quality is good, quite enjoyable...
'yandere' is ecstasy .........................................................................................................................
Oh man, this is such a great read! Where do I start? The premise itself is so interesting and fun.The world-building is nicely done, in depth and detailed and from the first few chapters we already get a sense of where the story is heading.The characters, honestly I love them all, a great ensemble, even if there are bad ones, the author gives them depth and tries to justify their reasons.The story itself has a mixture of everything, adventure, comedy, action and romance. Never thought Id say this but id like to see more romance hahaAltho I do appreciate the characters pov change, i feel like its a bit disconnecting to the reader if we stray away from the protagonist too long. Or this might just be a story with multiple protagonists at this point, which works! The writing style is simple yet descriptive and easy to follow! I really like it and the dialogue pops out but just a small complaint of mine, might be just my preference, but I wish author wouldnt just put dialogue as it gets a bit confusing as to whos saying sth. It might be beneficial to add a 'daren said' or other character said. All in all, great work and Im really amazed by your uploads and hard work!
Listen Author, Please don't drop this one. I am loving it. Great one from the beginning till the continuation. Recommended to all fantasy lovers.
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Can't wait to see more of the new team and the new planet,but bit worried about the old world,because of Noriko's Villain mom...!!I hope all are fine in Earth..!!
From the synopsis to the story itself i found myself so intrigued. well done author keep it up cant wait for more chapters to come. Will surely recommend this book to others