reviewing for the event fp. keep up the good work.
It has potential, but it has some points that should be improved in my opinion. The MC is very passive, has no ambition. I understand that caution is necessary, but there is a fine line between caution and cowardice. If the MC had ambition, he would look for more women to marry, so his power would increase. With more power the MC would expand his territory, his fame would increase, and more notable women would appear to be his concubine, so his power would exponentially increase the amount of women he has, like a snowball. Currently the MC just waits for someone to attack, then fight back, his only desire is to keep his rural town. It's really disappointing to see a novel with so much potential go down this path. Without power everything he has can be taken away at the whim of the powerful, ambition is a basic need in this kind of chaotic world.
I'm the greatest thing ever had passed the boy is not my fault because I have a question for me it's just a fictional character and story itself which is the best example of a game where the story of us where we are you doing tonight for sure if you want me some feat that Zeno can't
The cover is from "My three beautiful wives"
Read my thoughts..... Mc is 14 at the beginning of the story.... and yet for some unknown reason he is cautious and smart.. somewhat like he is not from a city of miner... He also started hiding his powers and abilities for some unknown reason (Well he did say that he didn't want to become the target of others envy... but the thing is... how does a 14 year old kid know all this, like did he read some kind of novel or stories, or is he from earth? well Author didn't say anything about it... it's like he is smart and has knowledge for some unknown reason)
Currently it is up to chapter 35, and i really like it. That's it, ACDPQS out!.........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Shameless Author here, The book is about a character named Allen who finds himself quite in the middle of it. Struggling to find his past while worrying about his future and where he stands in it all, he is searching for an artifact for reasons only the future knows and has not told him yet why. Well at least until he remembers it or they reveal it. Tune into more chapters to figure out who Allen is and why this artifact is so important. Also did i mention he is on a journey to and through out outerspace? He will meet many lifeforms and have to plan/fight his way out of many troubling scenarios. Find out what the artifact is and why Allen is so important in all of this. Aside from my future plans, please help this Author out and give me your honest feedback. I am always willing to improve and push the direction of this story in a way that benefits everyone. Mainly the shameless Author. Thanks!
So I'll giving you some review....I saw your post in the forum.I didn't actually read your novel, Because firstly I'm not a fan of a novel like this but I really thought that you are a good writer...Good luck to your novel???
I wonder how they did not fall. .
Fantasy stories like these always get me especially with the whole secret identity that really fills you with anticipation as you wait for him to reveal his real powers, keep it up author!
The novel is a great tree novel it is somewhat similar to ‘Tree of Aeons’. In that they raise/grow creatures in order to get stronger over time, they aldo discover abilities about them selves
I like the magic system in this story and also how the schools and rules of this energy are portrayed. It's only 8 chapters for today and they are short but the story has great potential