I've read until the first time Ophelia and Mika meet, at the end of the exam.
The system is interesting and some sort of non-isekai getting game'd but for Mika.
I think there's gonna be some subversion which make this interesting, yet I'm not into much this worldsetting. Still, it has some hook.
Gotta say, I'm not into this kind of power-trip "fantasy has to be like an rpg" + HxH tropes, and the writing has problems.
First, grammar.
Revise it.
Second, there's out-of-nothing information dumps or little to no info when things happen, making it kind of dissonant.
I'm a mangaka, so I can't give many writing advice beyond *rythm*, and with a story that begins with a mystery, information should be done little by little, and not give spoilers beforehand. Let the reader see that he will win without the narrator telling them when and how before the action happens.
Otherly, the descriptions of physical appearances are too much vague. We don't have much info about how it does resemble our world.
What is a military uniform in this context? Is it Medieval? Is it Modernist? From were? What kind of robe? What kind of badges?
Or the weapons.
What's the type of sword the MC has? Is it straight? Is it pointy towards the end? Diamond cross section? Is the cross section maybe hexagonal? Has a fuller? Maybe leaf-shaped?
Maybe it's the format of Webnovel that doesn't let authors to put in-between illustrations to give visual information, and it's something that it's seen on the purchased version, which unfortunately, I'm currently unable to have.
Still, remind you that even with all the criticism, it has hook and expected subversions of the tropes, so I'm hopeful this arrives to good ports.
Good luck and good writing, friend!
I'll gave this novel 5 shining shimmering stars
The story is very good, probably the best there is on the subject of football, although there is a novel that is very good, but that is not the theme, the real problem of this story, or what for me is a problem, is which develops very, very slowly, if in each game there are 3 or 4 episodes, we will never be able to see him play on a professional team, for the rest, it is very good.
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I don't know what exactly it is, but I truly hope that the author really works on this book with his full strength. I admire this work of fiction. This book is the only one out of hundreds that has stood up as a must keep in my library. BZ!
well the direction of the developing novel looks extraordinary
with the focus on mc as GK, he has a lot of potential to become one of the best
expecting more thrilling moments
really liked the cover! it was what caught my attention however the writing didnt really appeal to me. the story was fun to read though. all in all, this isnt a bad story
This story started out great but after the first 40 chapters it becomes an IQ reducing waste of time. The protagonist is the weakest and most indecisive character in the book! He makes all the wrong decisions and falls for the same trick more than three times. He doesn't think rationally and the only time he takes action is the go on rampage AFTER his girlfriend has already been hurt.
overall a good story! Author edited the first few chapters, n=but need to edit the remaining too. I have enjoyed it for now. my opinion is that author still need to give MC pov's a bit more though. If there is any new update, I will update my review later.
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Don't get your hopes up. This gem is hollow inside and here is why. I have read it entirely.
500 hundred chapters of awesomeness and then it spiraled into never ending repeating similar sentences, situations, tropes and same mold forgettable useless characters.
1.Romance is extremely badly incorporated into the story. Doesn't help when the main girl is nothing but a bland puppet with no personality used to move the plot.
2. MC goal ends to be with each next arc to get stronger and to create waves, one bigger than the other, his reputation MUST be illustrious.
3.He is the chief of lucky - 7-chosen lottery, everything of benefit comes handily to him just because.
4.Others exist to be impressed and to worship him.
5.Action chapters later are waving sleeves and all powerful snorting and many things that don't make sense.
6.Mc personality explained over and over again as so good and scholarly like, but his actions are in fact the exact 180.
7.Translator gripe- the repeated CAPS monologues are not the least bit shocking or interesting.
It was the best story for me up to when he gets at Yuanyung stage. I realised after a few arcs that Author got run out of ideas and the story got noticeably bad.
I think it as Overwhelmingly underwhelming story, because close to 1/3 of it was really awesome,even thought it had many problems whixh the story made up for, but overall my hope got crushed and I just read it to pass time, but it's really horrible.