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Previously MC said that he is not a faint-hearted person but he is afraid to change his thought of society pet to something more suitable to his situation, but that doesn't matter when your future happiness may be threatened. He seems like the typical person who would hit just because of his poor mentality and his high content of hypocrisy
I just loved the way the story develops, and how each character is described and given importance to. The way you blend the ancient history with the modern era is amazing. Keep up the good work. ;)Waiting for the next chapter<3
This is written amazingly, even if I'm not a fan of short-length chapters, I got to say that reading this always gives me the urge to continue.It is an amazing book, I'll be sure to keep reading it and I'll support you author, keep up the good work.And, though there are errors that disturbs my flow of reading, an update can easily fix it.
anyone have raws..?…...................................................…...................................................…...................................................
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It’s an okay book but the chapters are way to short to he considered a chapter. I’ll keep reading but I’m wasting my coins and coupons on this Fanfic
Don't let the poor ratings fool you. A bunch of people are made about a single sentence that is vaguely racist (which was removed) and are judging the whole novel based on that. So far this criticism is completely at odds with the rest of the novel's contents.This is a fun, wholesome novel similar to other beast cultivation novels and I recommend giving it a try.
sigh ... don't be fooled by the cover. the focus of the story is totally different. also, it is such a hard read. the story development is abrupt. dialogue feels out of place. sentences are sometimes so long that they stop making sense. author Skips some things which makes us understand what was he trying to say. he sometimes writes totally opposite things what he meant. which leaves us with scratch our head. wastes too much time in describing things which r not done properly. and I don't know what the heck is going on in most chapters. sigh....such a disappointment. I recommend author to write smaller sentences. and readers to read comments so they don't get much confused.
Like many before me, this author is shamelessly reviewing his own work. The story isn't perfect and it isn't boring either. Like many xanxia or eastern fantasy novels, you might find some cliche here and there or mistakes. Anyway, give it a try and you might end up liking it.
The author is really talented, but it's almost been a month since the break that was supposed to last a week. In these types of situations, I would like an update on why this happened so I know if its dropped or not.
Good day. Well, it's past midnight here, so I won't make my review formal as I am extremely sleepy to type. Writing Quality is absolutely great except for the slight punctuation mistakes here and there. One involved a comma, I didn't point out all of them since I didn't want to be nitpicky. When it comes to vocabulary, I like your choice of words. They aren't repetitive, but I would like to suggest that you keep the dialogue tags simple, and not use a thousand alternatives for "said" and "ask." Like what Stephen King said, " I think we all agree that dialogue tags are necessary for readers to know who’s talking. But writers are divided in how we use them:Some, including Raymond Carver, simply use “he said, she said”; others apparently invent a million different synonyms for “said”; still others try to find balance between the two extremes, sometimes even fifty-fifty.Yesterday, yet another writer, Jack Woe, jumped into the fray:I’ve read quite a few blogs about the evilness of dialogue tags. For example, Joe Moore wrote in The Kill Zone how new authors are overusing the alternatives of said.They go to: exclaimed, murmured, screamed, whispered, pleaded, shrieked, demanded, ordered, cried, shouted, and my all-time favorite, muttered.Thing is, I as a reader, don’t care. I just don’t read dialogue tags — at all.He’s not alone. To me, modifying such a perfectly fine tag as “said” is like Pimp My Ride gone bad. (Tip: Read that sentence again in Samuel L. Jackson’s voice.) I suggest you head over to Jack’s blog to read his brief, yet succinct musing over dialogue tags—or as Stephen King puts it in “On Writing”, “dialogue attribution.”A passionate adversary to adverbs, King warns against using adverbs in dialogue attribution, which reduce the effectiveness of the attribution verb:I insist that you use the adverb in dialogue attribution only in the rarest and most special of occasions … and not even then, if you can avoid it. Just to make sure we all know what we’re talking about, examine these three sentences:“Put it down!” she shouted.“Give it back,” he pleaded, “it’s mine.”“Don’t be such a fool, Jekyll,” Utterson said.In these sentences, shouted, pleaded, and said are verbs of dialogue attribution. Now look at these dubious revisions:“Put it down!” she shouted menacingly.“Give it back,” he pleaded abjectly, “it’s mine.”“Don’t be such a fool, Jekyll,” Utterson said contemptuously.The three latter sentences are all weaker than the three former ones, and most readers will see why immediately.[…]Some writers try to evade the no-adverb rule by shooting the attribution verb full of steroids. The result is familiar to any reader of pulp fiction or paperback originals:”“Put the gun down, Utterson!” Jekyll grated.“Never stop kissing me!” Shayna gasped.“You damned tease!” Bill jerked out.The best form of dialogue attribution is said, as in he said, she said, Bill said, Monica said.Keep things simple, but! That doesn't mean you'll only stick with said and asked. Just use them more often. Next, I love the way you convey emotions for your characters. They're very well done. Another suggestion is that you get to the point. An example of this is the first three to four chapters I think in which you spent all those four chapters to reveal she died. Also, during these chapters, I only noticed two things that revolved around it. Her unusual liking to kidnaps and something to do with asking herself if she really is dead. Perhaps you could cut off some unnecessary scenes there. Next, character design. Well done! I was able to imagine the looks of the characters in a few paragraphs or so, I don't believe you're a newbie writer. When I started out writing during my high-school times, I could barely think of any synonyms. There wasn't Google back then, so I had to rely on Thesauruses and Dictionaries in which it could only be found within libraries. Sigh, the nearest library from me that time was so far. It's also quite funny that this the countless time in a row of reading a novel that has something to do with death and being alive again. I guess that's the majority of books here. If there are any suggestions I could give, that would be getting used to using em dashes.You're first person POV is also quite great. It's not the boring, "I went here then go here and so on and so forth" type of first person. Well, that's all I can criticize for now. I know this review isn't formal, I'm missing the front matter and the summary, but then again, I've got to return to my sleep.That is all I can say for now. -Dann Giovanni