Hard to read , there's many grammatical errors, plot is alsi not going smoothly.
This is very good, author! My book has some similarities with yours and I think it is really amazing! Keep up the good work, I will look up to you
i recommend this book. great cultuvation story.. not cliche . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . .. . .. .. .. .
that s sounds like a nice story, but it could be better
wowww...Great work Author...I love the way you carry the story line and the characters nailed it...I hope your book will get top views and massive votes ❤️❤️❤️
This story feels rushed I and I believe others would be able to enjoy this story more if you, the author, put more time working on the base of your story. It has an interesting plot that personally interested me but from what I have read is being, and I mean well when saying this, terribly executed. The utter lack of details of the power system is annoying one chapter the mc is level 10 the next he saying he's basically level 25, which would be cool in all if we were told what he did to get to that level. We never see the mc fight like ever. The mc has a master class that allows to forcibly enslave from what we know any being and he gets 50% exp from their kills but we never get told how much exp a being gives which in turn just makes it feel like the author just levels them up conveniently. It is also said that the levels get increasingly hard to level up after certain marks for instance at level 25 it get harder and then 50 and so and so forth but the mc and his slaves seem to be leveling up even faster than before. I also seen that the author planned this story all the way up to volume 9 which I was originally excited about but you honestly wouldn't be able to tell if he just thought of on the spot none of this story seems well thought out. And don't even get me started on the fact that every interaction the mc has is with a girl and they conveniently have amazing potential. I have seen people put more effort into fanfics than this story and I'm not trying to discredit the author but its just what I get when I read your story. Its a pure wishfulfilment story. The author put most of his effort into describing his characters which doesn't matter if their setting is a blank canvas.
Some problems in here1. Grammar ( the subject like he, she, him, her)2. Time Skip ( so fast, but the mc power progress not )3. Change POV too much4. Good foreshadow ( or stupid cliffhanger?)The one that speak on opening ceremony, who knows so suddenly MC got Angry and didnt show up on next few chapter5. Stupid Power rankMC can smash new A Rank but cant beat Queen Spider? the one that he fought at 7 years old, and how old he is when she saved Lily? The way he wasting his time without power up with the so called future Right Hand of Demon King and his Memories, well yeah AMAZINGWell author admit too that he want irritate us with his MC and congrats you got it.
Adopted Soldier is one of my favorite books on this site, and the other book of the author demon lord's reincarnation is also pretty amazing.This story is also as good.Though the first few chapters might not seem as impressive (probably because the author said he had written those in high school), the story really picks up soon.It is amazing and the characters are really lovely.Keep it up author.
Some words during descriptions being repeated a little too often, e.g.; Was in the capital of the New World Order. The capital of the New World Order was called New Hope in honor of the New World Order...One paragraph had the descriptor mentioned 6 times.Mix up the sentences a little, maybe shrink it and it would be great. :]The story is interesting but a lot of information to digest in the early chapters. Looking forward to more!
The story is good for those who like an evil mc or just dont care. The author seems to be a beginner so there are some strange parts, but it will probably get better later.
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Blown away!!!I love this storyHooked right from the synopsisThe storyline and the plot is just wow!!Can even picture it on a screenGreat job author