Reviewed at chp157:TLDR: It's not bad but neither is it good. It's a good read to kill time but not for me. I dropped it after powering through 100+chps. I think the weakest aspects of this novel are going to be the MC or the plot. Still, I recommend to anyone interested to give it a try. Some of you might enjoy it ✌️WQ(4/5) - Very few grammar and spelling mistakes. Readable and decently written.SD(2/5) - Premise was interesting though the story development was subpar. Quite a few cliches and unfortunately far too many inconsistencies to ignore. Academy arc is quite boring imo. Overused cliches are fine as long as it's used well and presented in an interesting way. However, this was not the case here. CD(3/5) - I appreciate that author didn't want some Pokemon harem and actually tried to create interesting characters. However that took a dive once he hit the academy arc, I honestly think it's cause of the typical cliches found thus requiring some characters to be typical young master or damsel-in-distress archetypes.Now for the MC, oh boy, he's not evil but also not a goody two shoes, he's basically an average Joe who is actually rather pleasant. He's also a typical 'nice guy' in the romance department. Unfortunately it just seems MC doesn't learn from his mistakes and keeps mouthing off which causes him unnecessary drama and trouble. While it has also been stated that his world is cruel and strength is supreme, he also does not really show much initiative to actually get stronger or perhaps the author misuses time skips where MC doesn't seem to get any stronger. His system is also quite nerfed and it doesn't help that he's very lax when it comes to getting points. So while being in the academy, he doesn't truly require to be much stronger, in the broader world, he's actually very weak. I'm fine with weak characters, what I'm not fine with is characters who stay weak, who doesn't 'try hard'. US(4/5) - Author is consistent with updates and keeps interaction with audience. As this is his first novel, he's also very open to actual criticisms.WB(3/5) - Hard to judge as it's not a fanfic with an established world setting and since it's still the academy arc as of this review, we have a limited world scope. The introduction to their power system and settings is done in the initial chapters to get readers acquainted and is interesting enough. The world building hasn't truly begun to me.To the author:Now for a first novel of the author, not bad, decent attempt. I'm sure you'll improve after this and I hope to see your future works but for now this novel ain't for me. I still wish you all the best author! Keep striving and improving, you have potential!
typical hiding M.C...if u jst keep on hiding why are you getting angry...u are a trillionare why are u still going to class ??? #DONT READ #DONT READ #DONT READ #DONT READ
I only read it till chapter 40 because it became boring.................................................................I read this is qidian...
I really like how funny the 2 Mc and how they resolve their problems.The relationship between the two are interesting and funny.thank you for writing this
Author-special-five-star-review!!! Version 3!!! (Probably final version) Thanks a lot, to everyone who’s taking their time to read through all my stuff. I really don't know why I thought it was a good idea to put a suicide scene in my synopsis… It not like it’s a story defining scene in the novel or anything either, it’s just a part of a side-story that I love very dearly. Layla Pog T_T Anyway, in this review, I’ll try to explain my story and why you should read it. And just like how the review system works, I’ll divide this review into four parts (Writing quality, Story, Characters and World-building) and give my thought process on them. Writing quality: Most of the story, you’ll see something similar to what I wrote on the synopsis. Since this was my first time writing anything, the novel had some problems which I've been trying my best to fix over time, but finally, I can confidently say that I've done a good job of cleaning up the story (for the most part). I can also confidently say that you will find typos, grammatical or punctual mistakes and some repeats of words and expressions and whatnot. (I did a spelling check like four times and I still find some mistakes here and there to this day. I'm sorry I’m a failure) Story - General feel: Alright, after you’ve just read the synopsis (or if you know the previous review I put here), you probably think that this novel is something grim dark and depressing, right? You’re right. At least, on some occasions. Those “some occasions” mostly being the side stories and the World building stuff that pops out throughout the story. But if I were to write a completely honest synopsis, it would probably go like this: [A 300-year-old spirit does slice-of-life things in another world. There’s also some stuff about him trying to achieve immortality, unearthing the secrets of the Final Empress, discovering the history of a broken empire, yada yada.] So yeh. Story – Themes Hmm… I guess the biggest theme in my novel turned out to be one’s identity. Although I want to explain this part a bit better, honestly, I’m struggling a bit with the concept myself, so I guess you can see me trying to wrap my head around it through Evin’s story. There’s also some more parts expressing such mind-blowing new ideas like: life sucking, war being bad, ethical dilemmas, ignoring morals entirely due to circumstances and then feeling bad, etc, etc. Story - Pacing and development: Warning: Slow story. If you don’t like slow stories don’t read. I don’t know how, but I’m able to write on seemingly the most mundane of things continuously, and most readers love them for whatever reason. There’s also the side stories that pop out occasionally. Obviously, I try to connect them into the main story and push the story ahead, but a lot of others will probably feel bored through it and want to kill themselves. That’s completely okay. Just leave the story and read a more fast-paced story; there’s like at least 16 of them on the site(I know since I tried counting them all). Characters: My goal when I was writing this story, is that every character could become a waifu for someone(even the MC! nANI?) and that they don’t just exist to further the plotline. Also, even if I don’t write about it on the novel all the time, I try to give every character a proper backstory (that exists in a very rudimentary way inside my head). This helps a lot in helping me decide what kind of actions they will take in certain situations. I’m also focusing a lot on giving the charas proper flaws and whatnot so they can get satisfying development and whatnot. MC: Also, MC will make dumb mistakes, suboptimal decisions, weird thoughts a lot of times. He will not be perfect, he will not always win, and he will not always be cool. So, if you want a self-insert power-fantasy story, then this novel is probably not for you. But I don’t want you to think that this novel literally has no satisfying moments. I’d write a bunch of stuff here to prove this point to you, but I feel that you should experience it yourself. World-Building: It’s lit fam. At least according to all the readers. And honestly, I really like it as well, so I spend a lot of time trying to keep things consistent and plot-hole free. Sadly, I do a really shit job at it, so feel free to point out any inconsistencies you may find and call me a degenerate human being for writing such low-quality content. Don’t worry, I won’t cry. Jokes aside, I’m actually thinking of taking a 1 or 2 week break to dedicate all my to fixing some stuff, but At any rate, that’s all for now, thanks for reading till the end. Enjoy.
Hey guys! This is the Author with a brand new story. As this is a WPC entry, this story was never premeditated so bear with the story.The story focuses on the main character's journey towards self-discovery. He is an NPC that suddenly gained sentience without the need for an AI. And of course, he's immortal and brings a chicken with him, cuz why not?
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I really like this story so far. It’s interesting and it has a good flow, as well as good pacing. I just hope he doesn’t drop it. You should check this story out.
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The story is very detailed and will give the readers a vivid imagination of the situation and characters. This story is also good in terms of explaining the origin of the said virus. It is also uniquely done and I love the way it was placed in the Philippines. Good job author. I hope you write more stories in the future and remained the talent of writing in your hands.
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Great read. The book is very detailed and interesting. Also I like the fact that there are more than one character that will be playing big in the story, so that I don't have to always see a name start each paragraph.