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I have to say, the concept of the author is truly amazing! I really like how the story progresses by killing someone that the MC (Akio). Love that part! Will surely read more of your novel, mate!I do have some few points to point out. The story you wrote mostly has "telling" and few "Showing". It would be awesome if you could describe Aiko's facial expression, how his heart skipped a beat after seeing his parents dead, or the pain surging from his skin. These things helps us, reader, to imagine the scene more than saying they were covered in blood.Although the informal introduction was a bit funny, in formal writing (writing a book), that technique might appear odd. I don't know if this part is a matter of perspective, but I think sticking to formalities such as telling the character from someone else (another character) or an identification card (a subtle introduction) would be preferred than saying it on the spot. Lastly, there are some dialogue tags such as "An old man was seen talking to me." might appear correct, but in a dialogue tag, it sounds confusing. A simple "An old man walked up and said." would do its job since "said" is an invisible dialogue tag. There are few dialogues such as "Can you not." Spoken by the main character might appear force. Although that might appear witty, I think something like "Are you mocking me!" might show anger and hatred towards the creature imitating his parents before they died would bring more emotions. Kudos for the author!
I have a little question and I dont know if it was answered before, here I go, since the protagonist has a body with her own background then that mean now she have two parents?, (the ones when she was a guy and the others of her actual body), if it is a yes, there will be chapters of both parents interacting with each other?
I won't lie it's a little short but give it a tryMADE YOU LOOK..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,,..,.,,.,..,,..,.,.,.,.,.,
I wonder if Asura knows that everyone is in just ad much pain as him? I’m sure it can feel like he’s alone but he isn’t. This novel springs out the unspoken territory of the human mind and the devestation that results from it. It may even act as a voice for the silenced. I urge the author to keep going and find novels that intrigue them too. Rise! ???
I am offended by the amount of spiritual stones required to read this.....--- ------------------..l..
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If I have to read one more time just how awesome China is and how faking car accidents is a sing of a stable government, I will find a way to reduce this novel to a 1 star rating.If you haven't guessed it yet, this novel takes nationalism to the extreme.
this story started out sorta ok but then it deteriorated into a mishmash of randomness thrown into a sort of followable story. like ADHD meets writing meets stupidity
this novel was absolutely fantastic I'm more than happy with how this went I just wish that a few of the plot holes were filled the three lives underwater manor just disappeared as did redsnow and the others as did spring and so on nothing to big just minor things and I hope that the author will write another book in this series super impressed
Give it a try for at least 10 chapters. It is a really good cliche-break.The idea used is nothing new, but definitely fresh. The comedy is hillarious. Definitely will be a good read maybe up to 200 or more before the story goes haywire. Maybe