When the girl Will notice she been abused? And the nouns até confusing.
overall great prologue and great story building steady characters and reasonable direction. the names threw me off at first but got used to them and overall great story so far and great writing i see nothing wrong. good job
Story OK. To be fair the author did say its his first novel and he isn't a native English speaker. And it shows. Badly. I've dropped it. I rarely drop books just because of writing quality but I couldn't continue.This was as bad as mtl. The bad ones. BUT if you can handle mtl or are not a native speaker then this isn't really a problem. As this was also the authors first work, other problems such as story pacing, character progression, character interaction and behaviour all needs work. Theres a lot of telling and very little showing. This comes with practice, time and experience.My advise to the author as simply a fan of light novels is to read more well written English novels. Not translated, but actual English novels. You'll pick up a lot and it'll help you construct your novels better in tbe future.For anyone who read all this and want an actual review.. Transmigration story where male MC gets into modern world with monsters. System makes him cultivate stronger. For once the original body isn't some begger or poor son which is actually refreshing. It's why I think this author with some work and experience can actually write a good novel in the future.
in this story, ALL women have problems with smell !! in every chapter and with any movement of the body, mouth, wind, thoughts, "mysterious" aromas are carried ...
complicated. after 40 chapters, I still didn’t fully understand the structure of the world and I hardly understand it, it coexists at all. And so it’s almost an ordinary Chinese young master hitting unbelieving faces ...
Probably one of the best reincarnated into a villain novels I've read in a while.
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I’m really hoping the brother is the ML. I hate the older brother, he raped her. Assuming the car accident was not her fault, please author she deserves a better half.
So this is a prequel from "the portal of wonderland" and shared universe with "a record of Mortal's Journey To Immortality".................
I lost some brain cells reading this just by the amount of forced plots, the stupid motivations behind characters actions and when the author makes the mc stupid just to keep the plot going, the only way to enjoy this is if you turn off your brain, and even then I still go a headache after reading 100, there was just too much bs and unnecessary drama...
nothing original and not worth reading horrible played out tropes and stupid mc filing up space and more and more and more and more and more
That's easy. Marry the son to the sister, encourage the boy to start a harem. This will automatically annoy the sister/wife who will complain to the father/father-in-law. The MC's cultivation is the same as the father-in-law's because they are the same person, so by the rules of the system he needs to overcome himself. End result a family more united than is necessary, the son with a harem, nobody needs to leave the house, a super strong MC, Sweet home Alabama soundtrack. And a daughter no one cares about after all, female characters disappear after marriage, a side effect of jade skin after the loss of chastity.