Let me take a minute to process everything..... This was nice! A whole new level kind of nice! A heart tearing kind of nice that left us, readers, feeling emotional and passionate and...man I'm so touched. This is a one in a million kind of nice.You did a good job there author! I wish you luck on your writing journey! I look forward to more of your incoming chapters. Hands raised to you! Keep up the good work!
It's a quite good read. It's new with new thoughts and plot twists and turns. Signing out
Everything in this novel is great, stories great, characters are great(specially the MC, not one dimensional like the rest of the original authors in this website who copies Chinese authors characters, which just ends up a poor imitation of them, which is quite honestly embarrassing). The chapters are long which is great.The chapters format is great (very convenient to read on phone). The world could be fleshed out more though but that can be fixed in later chapters.The only problem with this novel, is the update for chapters but I guess it’ the price for quality.PS Authors who are reading this, learn from this author on how to make an OP character in his story, be interesting and great to read.One of diamonds among the trash in this app.
Мне понравилось, очень интересно и классно, практически не видел таких фанфиков про попаданца с силой санс, продолжай в том же духе. ............................................
it’s called character development give it time and he will change this makes the story more enjoying to read rather then have an op mc with an op system and is a super giga ultra instinct chad with intellect and cunning that make all the worlds smartest and most political politicians look like retard
Writing Quality:A lot of mistakes but the author has been improving. So that's good, It would be a good idea to edit the first chapter though.Updates:From a lot weekly to 1 weekly. Authors say he spends 5 hours per chapter and can't do anymore. Let's believe him for now.Story:Great idea, meh execution. Focus HEAVILY on interactions between characters on the family, basically isolated from the world or government. No suspension from the government why a billionaire would construct a prepper house? Plus the information the military have? They can't connect the dots?A lot of things that in real life you would be questioned and even detained.I don't like the idea that he doesn't explore other ideas in his mind until he resolves which idea would stick around and his reason. He just have to accept that and continue.Character: Awful, just awful.Like MANY MANY authors that writes stories of people coming back from the future they forget about the personality changes that would have. Their different approaches in life, their way to deal things, if you are in a world where you have to hunt constantly for food I don't think you would be very adept to diplomatic solutions the first day you come back to the past.Second point: Loli and sister complex. The author tries too hard to make their interactions between the siblings cute. Is cringe as f.uck. I would skip them since most authors tend to rant about sis-con a lot (that took almost 5 chapters of skips mind you).The author doesn't place himself in the MC place so the interactions are awkward and cringe mostly. And all the member of the family trust 100% in him, even if the changed 180 degrees from day to night (Not even gonna ask him to see a doctor or send him to a clinic for checks).World Background:The author really tries to give a background about the story but really can't deliver in an interesting way to tell it. So he just info dump it. I put 4 stars because of the efforts he makes. But the author needs to learn to deliver the background information when is needed, not when is possible.Final Thoughts:I put myself in the MC place. I would approach it in a different way, but each person is different. I will tell you some ideas and you can take it into an account or discard it (but telling it in the story why) to make the readers think that the MC isn't going to that place because that is the perfect plan and we just have to accept it.1- Self Sustained environment. Yes, you put facilities and all that, but a "fortress house" has to ensure food and other stuff for all the population there. Clean water? Where the wastes go? Farming? Specialist about this? 2- He knows his principal enemies will be the military and mutated beast. But I don't see anything in his plan planning to counter that, only hide. I would hire scientists to teach me how to analyze animal behavior, ho to detect their weak points, alimentations, territory marks, footprints. How to dissect animals, how to make armor/weapons of their hide and limbs,etc. SO MANY BETTER WAYS TO SPEND TIME. 3. Be A-ok with the government/military on the surface, but also monitoring them. Send some of the few personals he has to monitor them or pay an underground organization to have sent them information. Information is power.TL,DR: 15 yo MC who didn't grow in the 10y in the other world, Billionaire MC so difficult set to Very Easy, Sister Complex MC, Info Dumps of Backgrounds. 2.5 Stars. My principal problem is the MC mentality. Not even the story or the nonsense blind faith they have on him. My problem is his decisions that seem based on choosing the most expensive thing on each catalog and thinks he is good to go.
Utterly horrible English. Characters change gender at a whim, story doesn't flow. random emojis are used. could be a great story. does not do world building well.
I don't know. It's ok. I am not native either so I gave 4 stars for quality. The story is at the beginning and I like reincarnation novels and so on. Let's wait and see. The review can be changed after some time. I hope you won't disappoint me author-san!
This book has a lot of potential. The plot is very intriguing and characters are well written and real. I've only read up to 4 chaps which is not enough to give a detailed and decent review, but this book has been amazing till now and i hope it will be in the future too. And it seems that the author is new as well. I hope you will not drop this.
So this is an OK Novel, helps pass the time. MC is typical poor bloke in the beginning, but after getting the mall system everything turns out to be cool. Story is good. translation and editing are very poor.
Soap in a cultivation world? ?That’s outright ridiculous. These beings possess spiritual energy that allows them to cleanse their bodies in seconds. Why would anyone waste time or resources on something as mundane as soap? It completely undermines the essence of a cultivation world where the focus is on transcending the mortal plane and mastering energy beyond the physical.Hospitals and schools in a cultivation world? Even more absurd. True cultivators don't fall ill—spiritual energy fortifies their bodies and purges any impurities or diseases. Hospitals and doctors would be irrelevant unless we're talking about a mortal or very low-level world. As for schools, most cultivation worlds feature sects, clans, or academies where knowledge is passed down through strict mentorship, ancient manuals, or inheritances. The idea of modern-style schools in a high-fantasy cultivation world is just lazy world-building.And if there are no sects, clans, or academies in this so-called "cultivation world," then what even is it? Cultivation worlds thrive on power struggles, legacy conflicts, and the rivalry between factions like sects, prestigious clans, or imperial academies. Without these, the story loses its foundation. The only way this premise could make sense is if the protagonist transmigrated to a trash, barbarian-like world still stuck in a tribal era. Even ordinary mortal worlds in a decent cultivation setting would have basic things like healers, herbal remedies, and schools for basic literacy. For a cultivation world to lack even the fundamentals is just nonsensical. At this point, calling it "trash" would be generous. World-building is the backbone of cultivation stories, and this synopsis seems to have failed miserably.?️????
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