For now, the story is quite good. But seeing that the chapters are still a few, I can't say much about this novel. However, I could say that, although it is good, the writing is too draggy. Too much information on a lot of not really useful stuff. I hope the author takes my advice to not really dragged the description too much and also some paragraph are too long as i read on a phone. Thank you.
The story is quite good and well written, however the pacing is quite slow and the focus is only on the romance part. I picked it up for the Gacha and fantasy, but still the romance is quite interesting and I'm liking it despite not coming here for romance. As for the story, if we exclude the dates and dinner, the only real development was him helping his mother out. But again from the perspective of a romance novel, the characters are developing, there are feelings and emotions so that's a great thing.
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It's so good!! I recommend this to all readers.
I love your stories and your ideas are very creative .Your characters are really interesting,You have a great writing style that makes everything feel real.
it has a beautiful beginning waiting to see where this leads .
The chapters are few, not cool man. Author update. Both of them are mafia gurus and I can not wait for him to tame her. He seems to be a step ahead and it is killing her.
Keep it up Author-san. The story had me hooked from the start. I have high hopes for this novel.
I tried my hardest to deliver the story I thought so for the effort, 5 ⭐.My main focus is horror and scary elements in this novel. Inspired from JJK a little, like I took Ghost concepts from Curses. Try reading it and any question you have, ask below. ????
it's a good read and honestly has some great potential if the author really puts the effort into it.
The 3rd person is very prominent and makes this extremely difficult to read. Basically every line starts with the characters name and then proceeds to explain what that character does or says. It is almost similar to reading a script. The grammar is also just generally not great, though that can be improved. My main critisizism is the way the story is told to you instead of you experiencing. It's like this character did this and said that and felt that way. The writing should express that, but leave some room for interpretation instead of being so closed. Hope my ramblings make some sense, this is intended to be constrcutive not cruel.
So far its been a nice read. MC isnt stupid and is doing things the smart way. I do wish he would utilize resources more like Alices dad could help make a guild etc I mean guess he is going more for personal power until he meets the people he was with in past life. I dont know how leveling in game relates to real level in life but if it does then he should be helping all those people who stuck by him to level up faster etc..The romance does need some work author since it feels too rushed and quick so maybe a little bit of work on that