My first story about A-B-O. My breakdown. Good writing with excellent flow and immersion. The characters are not flat but have some flesh. Not very erotic, but that's probably my Cis talking. Good job. Definitely reminds me of that song Self Esteem by The Offspring. I think I just dated myself. ??
Ish very good. Mshi knosh very welsh to deshend himshelf. Nice Nice Nice. I don't know what else to say. What's matters is the MC isn't those pure righteous people. MC has a cute sister that I imagined that look like young Wendy..but I'm pretty sure she's not hehe
Wow!! This is a nice story. Quite interesting. Sam is just a beast in human form. Why can't him allow small Jessy to rest? At least he's succeeded in taking her parents live, FCS he need to let her be. Any way, I'm yet to know what will finally happen to Sam since he's refused to give Jessy breathing space. How I wish Dave would play his cards well.....Jessy would be the happiest one ever
Having read this makes me interested with the genre. Needs a bit of work with grammar and punctuation. The plot is interesting as speculations can be formulated from the context.
At least change the plot wherein the mc was betrayed and then got reborn before the game was launched. That plot is overused already in many game novels in this site. This novel is cliche and unoriginal in my opinion.
the writing us definitely off, or maybe it's the translation. it's not really that good and the story doesn't flow well. it's hard to tell who's who and the dialogue isn't the best
come on this is a good book, for me it's way better than "Pocket Hunting Dimension
A straight up good read, at least for the nineteen chapters trail read gives. A slow burn for sure without the instant power up a system novel gives, but this gives it strength in it's world building. His 'cheat' gives access to pills and item's, along with cultivation arts. But none suddenly give a boost to some random new stage of cultivation the author had pull out their butt to try and keep the reader going. This is a great thing! Without the huge focus on what realm the MC has reached, we skip the enemies he faces randomly popping up with stupidly high realms for him to miraculously overcome. We get actual story! A empire, a village, an event, and what's happening in them and to who, all deliver a depth I wish I could see more often. Chapters are long and kept me reading far longer than other stories. I've dropped stories faster than I got thru the first ten. The there's not much of the character spelled out for you. You will have to look at the actions and decisions to see the peoples character, as in the MC isn't going to just stop the tale and wax poetic about his morals and goals. It's been so long since I've read a story not seemingly written as a rough draft, this is the closest to an actual novel.I want more!
This story is awful. What's worse the tags are wrong.The protagonist is a complete White-Knight (righteous hypocrite) character who 'righteously' expands his harem. How does he do this? Conveniently the MC will meet Heavenly Beauties, and soon after there'll be great opportunity for him to save them. They of course can't help but swoon - if they aren't falling for him fast enough, his cultivation technique will have him lose control, leading to him r@ping them. The victim becomes a tsundere and realises who her true love is - the MC...If this wasn't enough, this novel has the annoying tendency to 'power-up' the entire harem every time the protagonist's power increases. Artefact (necklace) given to harem member 1 turns out to be a godly artefact and she suddenly becomes tyrannically powerful! How a novel could go so wrong is beyond me. This is a shockingly poor novel.
To author Devil_Paragon,This is the 2nd book that I just finished reading. I really like it, the plot, the character design and development, all the works in this book captures me just like your first one.I know your having financial difficulties right now as well as I am too. I just hope that you can finished this story for us your avid readers.I am going to read your 3rd book now even if it is not yet finished because I know in the future you will complete it all.Thank you and more power.
Excellent story. Short, but entertaining!!Read this when it was being written a few years ago. The story is pretty direct and doesn't have the MC go on a constant nonstop adventure. He has a goal, he works hard to achieve it.
Story starts of decently. But around chapter 100 the story starts to drag and at chapter 200 it grows bad. On the positive side, if you like face slapping this story might be for you, but let me explain.a usual progression of a martial arts novel formula is usually: overarching plot -> current plot -> introduction of enemy, most of the time both long and short term enemy -> face slapping -> winning some reward -> repeat above.this novel is different starting at chapter 200 its all about:introduction of short term enemy -> face slapping -> repeator in other words its invincible dragon but meant seriously. i could swear, that i read the sentence 'MC was so strong that...' either way, only read if you like the above mentioned formula. i dont know how many tens of chapters and how many enemies it has been since the plot really progressed.