Good start and story. If author just cuts the sentences into several pieces and sometimes use comma, it will be great. I’m just assuming it hasn’t gone popular yet because it hadn’t been published for long and the author hasn’t gained enough exposure.
Woah!! Such an amazingly written book ?Firstly the wonderful writing and wordings attracted my attention?Then this interesting plot just drew me into reading it further??Great job done by the author writing this beautifully written work ????
*sigh~* Another check-in novel... at least the mc isn’t a eunuch, am I right?
you writing style is so confusing I need to read couple of time to understand it.Overall good idea but bad delivery.,........................
Do we have any idea what the raw is for this one? Because it's quite clearly a totally different story(or possibly two or three) which the editor has randomly smashed into unrecognizable trash with the consistency of diarrhea. I'm quite interested in finding out just how terrible this editor is at this by reading the free chapters of the raw, even if it's faloo.
this is not a novel this is a piece of art, like seriously, I find this well done, the way of the writing, the way the author describes the characters+envirement, just from reading the first 10 chapters I can feel that the author had spent an amount of time proofreading and writing this chills, literally chill when the author described the fighting scenes.I'm shocked by how this novel is written, also alarmed of how this novel isn't on the top 5, I did read all the novels on the top 15 but no one amongst them is delightful as this one How author? how are you this unlucky? vampire system =trash I smell a conspiracy
now this is neat like real neat, definitely vote for this one It's the most unique out of the batch and I'm a big fan of like body tempering
really good novel????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
I'm not too familiar with system novels bcz I haven't read a lot of them. I know they're currently mainstream but this one doesn't fall very short. I've read a few chapters now and I decided it's about time I gave a review on it.Synopsis: Not bad. It's detailed enough to get the reader to understand what the book is about and it doesn't betray your expectations.Writing Quality: This isn't bad but it isn't perfect either when it comes to grammar. The word choices are okay and it's fluent enough for anyone to read. However, I noticed a few missing punctuation marks, run-on sentences, and sometimes unnecessary wording. I know it can be difficult to get your English perfect because it is a tricky language but the grammar isn't bad by any means. It isn't perfect but it's FAR from unreadable. Good work.Story Development: IMO, this isn't bad. As stated before, I haven't seen many system novels because they aren't exactly my cup of teaching (Apart from Solo leveling. That was fire? lol). However, from what I've seen, the book at the very least has potential. It's just up to the author to do what he can to bring out the full potential of this book. Many will gravitate to it if this is done right. I am certain of that.Character Design: I don't usually mark for this because it's up to the reader's preferences sometimes, whether or not they want described characters or if they wish to use their imagination. However, I'm a fan of descriptive writing. It brings flair and pizazz. Updating Stability: From what I've seen so far, updates are constant enough. The author doesn't lag very much. Readers will appreciate that.World Background: IMO, could use a little more flavor. I hope I'm not forgetting anything cause I tend to have a forgetful memory when it comes to smaller details. However, the world background isn't bad but it could use more. As stated before, I'm a fan of descriptive writing so yeah.Overall: This book isn't bad and it has potential without a doubt. Currently, to be 100% honest, it doesn't seem all that binge-worthy to me as I could hardly find much motivation to read more than 2 chapters a day (But don't let this bother you. Few books give me that binge-worthy feeling). However, as stated before, the book has potential and the author seems creative enough to go further. Readers, support the author and you'll have a FANTASTIC story. Message to the author: I know writing can be difficult, speaking from my experiences. However, don't give up. If you enjoy writing then keep at it and you'll get better without a shadow of the doubt. You'll sometimes see collections fluctuate. Today you might gain 3 then tomorrow you lose 4. But that's all part of the process. Don't be afraid of going back through older chapters and making adjustments if you deem it necessary. And most of all, don't give up. Remember this always; if you don't like the story you're writing then there's a high chance that the readers won't either. So have confidence and good luck!
This novel is barely in the reading to pass time zone.The problem is that the world building and the mechanics of the magic system aren't defined in a consistent way. Which leads to the MC being awesome, but not comparable to anything.If one can reach a rank with enough training, why does the difference between spells matter so much? Why is it important to condese magic power? The author simply tells us it is and we as the readers have to accept it.An example is the fact that the MC always practices only the basics of magic and so far only one element. Why? Why are the basics so important? I understand that the basics can strengthen the foundation and this is important, but even the most patient and wise humans on the planet know that advanced techniques are important in any field, that is why they were developed.It feels like the only reason the MC practices at all is to get the system rewards, which is what actually gives him strength.It is like he goes to work every day for money, he doesn't gain anything during practice, he just gets rewarded for doing so.MC is also way to passive and mostly a nonentity in this story. We could literally exchange him for any other student and nothing would change.
So…I’m on the 17th chapter and while the story’s been great so far, it hasn’t warranted the 5* review I’m currently giving. What warrants this 5* review is my pity towards the author for having to deal with so many readers that don’t pay attention. As I said, I am on chapter 17 and I’ve lost count how many times people have attempted to fix the author’s “errors” for things they didn’t pay attention to. There have been explanations to all stat changes, or lack there of yet these readers constantly believe they know what they are talking about which then leads to further confusion as other readers begin to believe what they say.Sorry author, story’s great and I have plans on catching up, hope you the best.
It's a great book, the story is very interestinga nd the characters are well made! keep up the good work ^^