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Good job so far with the writing! I think that you are off to a good start as an author and am absolutely looking forward to reading more of your releases!-dff123P.S. Let's be friends on discord ;)
Great story with touches of history. Kinda reminds me the stories of Jane Austen and a similar timeline. Loved the progress of the story and the characters development.
First of all, writing quality won't be what readers would expect in what we call professional writing, but giving the author a chance since we find out he is still in school, I'd like to give him a 4/5 for his ability to write.Why not a 5/5? It's a journal. It's not always going to follow a proper format that an essay or a novel would require, so it doesn't have to follow any rules. Grammar? Spelling? Those rules and restrictions don't apply to this piece of literature. Sure, it will help in the long run, as it will get the writer in the habit of writing, but it's not needed.Many famous writers have horrible journals or diaries with mistakes in them. While some writers have neat and perfectly written journals, it's not a mandatory rule to follow the rules of writing here.The author is using this journal as a form of writing practice, and WebNovel doesn't disallow it.Stability of Updates are great considering the author is a student and we all know that students have their own homework, assignments, and "life" to live. I give it a 4/5 for this as well since as journals go, they won't always be consistent, but it's not up to us, the readers, to decide when the author should update or not.Everything else I give a 5/5. A real-life story will have a real story development, character designs based on actual real human beings, and a world background in present day modern earth in the protagonists own home field. Quality writing starts here, and the author has it all. I MEAN IT'S A JOURNAL FOR THE DEVIL'S SAKE, rating this any lower than a 4 or 5 out of 5 is an insult to the author's way of life.I'm rooting for the author, and hopefully in the near or late future we'll be able to see original and quality "fiction" from him.Cheers! A big Cheers for Sir Calamity!
From what I can say after reading 6 chapters is that the story has got potential. The character development is good, the author is trying to make the MC look innocent, not like other novels where the MC is a rogue. The relationship of the MC with his parents caught my eye. Not many stories focus on something like this. I hope you don't drop it and keep up the good work.
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This is only a review on eight somewhat short chapters, but the story is well on its way to the main section (from the synopsis anyway) to the forming and fighting of Maddoxx’s squad.The writing is pretty average, it’s neither terrible nor great. There are a few missed capitalizations, but other than that, sentences are structurally correct. For details on the settings or mood, it’s mostly sound effects that are employed, so other forms of showing the story rather than telling could be added.Story-wise, the plot is understandable, but it has a few gaps that might be filled in later such as why Mr. Golden has a specific interest in making Maddoxx into a man and whether he’s done this before in some kind of program rich men like to pass the days doing; why Dimitri is in the cell/how he got there, if there are any other prisoners undergoing the same thing as Maddoxx if not, why single him out for torture; why the Russian mafia is breaking in and the possible connection to Dimitri.The torturing is somewhat reminiscent of Tokyo Ghoul. The character development from the torture could be a little more dramatically and believably done. Or perhaps added to that, more backstory and fleshing out of the MC. To simply say he’s an average dude with no dreams isn’t enough. Everyone has some kind of wish if not a dream, or some desire or hope. If he’s really so apathetic, then there should be some reason or experience that makes him that way. Or with the torturing, build up that madness and growth bit by bit.Dimitri at this point is better fleshed out/original than the MC. The defining reason why is his swallowing of the “gum.”I can definitely see this becoming a good story once the plot gaps, descriptions, and character development improves/get filled in. It’s just a few steps away, but nice work so far!
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Hummmm I smell a good story! And when you say you won't drop it, it make me want to support you ! Hope you'll be noticed soon!????????????
shameless author review i will try and post one chapter a day and make sure the quality's good please correct me on spelling grammar please just give me criticism to help me improve my writing. Thank you
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there are way too few reviews even after all this time? idk something seems a little bit sus in here ?. so i will leave this to see if it'll get deleted or not in the future. also the story is good just give it a try.