Hey guys. This here is my first work posted here on webnovel.com. As I am still very new to writing, I'd appreciate any feedback for my work, positive or otherwise. Please do give it a try. It may not appeal to everyone, I would like to try making it a somewhat unique reading experience. Thanks in advance guys and gals.
I am waiting for the author to complete it.
it gets very wierd at later chapters with clone and stuff. Basically clone NTR as clones have their individual soles and stuff.Also MC is very unlikeable , simp and staying within his sister's garsps. The whole novel give NTR vibes sorry :(
a huge waste of potential, I love the power the MC has, but like I said you wasted it on a psychopath, you could literally do anything with it but you just go with sadistic jerk who only live to find entertainment like an addict trying to find his next fix....Well good luck in you story with your psychopath of a MC.
I only put this review because I like the story and to support you in moving forward with this novel. I wish you all the best and success ☺️????
Don't even think about dropping this author, "VARNA" we shall see about this in future. ??????
definitely a romance story rather than fantasy. it's well written and if that's your type of genre you'll probably enjoy it. I personally think the harem is just way too big already and we're only at chapter 90 it feels a little like the author has a big and well done emotional arc planned for every new member of the harem but since once that story is told you wouldn't immediately have another big trauma/emotional moment to cover they just introduce another character wether this is ultimately what this story will become or not i can't say at this point. The fantasy elements are too irrelevant to the story for my liking and barely even qualify as a sub plot at perhaps 1/10th of the story content. We barely have any relevant dungeon clearing (2 so far and they were very quick and kind of mid) the exploration of the MC's powers's also gets very little room and tends to happen of screen which is a cardinal sin imo
The abstract is amazing, not too much revealing about the plot, after reading all the 15 chapters, i can feel like this novel as the potential. words are common not too difficult to read, which is the best thing because other reader who are not fluent in english can also enjoy the novel.
keep it up author and make sure to upload 1 or 2 chapters daily.
The author's a bloodthirsty psychopath. He has even written one into the story. It's basically: mechs, kill everyone, I will rule everyone, kill these leaders, kill this maid, kill that mistress....
I keep seeing the comparison that everyone else is a returner. Yes, the MC is abandoned by god too, but he is left to struggle and survive. It is a bit slow at the beginning, but it showcases the MC growth and emotional state. A recommended must read.
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Tsk tsk, you must go worship Fang Yuan. If you dare screw him over, you are simply courting death. Good work making use of the unexplained lotus people, my theory is that was Spectral Soul and Red Lotus collaborating in sealing the immortal zombie and not provoking heaven will or just an arrangement.