D*mn, your novel is so good they already make the book out of it. Please share us the novel illustration too
Already action-packed from the get-go, with a dame knight as the MC. Nice storyline, I believe that there’s more we have to see from the story’s development.
I will try my best to keep an honest and fair review. First and foremost writing, quality is five stars there is only small problem here and there not worth to be mentioned. second : update stability which we don’t have any problem here too.three: and hear the problem begin the story development is very shallow and cliche was a couple of loop hole in the story which has been corrected. fourth: character design all the characters of the stereotype very shallow have no personality and no buildup on the personality let me simplify it for you the story take place inside a third rated game and the character are 2d and there is no role beyond this to the character for example the side character that has been kicked out of the school he didn’t explore his character beyond the fact that he is obsessive of the original protagonist you didn’t show why he’s so obsessive with her did he have trauma in his life or she remain him of his deceased mother or something like that. and if you want my opinion to improve the character design of the protagonist you can make the protagonist completely confused with the memory of the original bodies owner and he feel everything that that the original body owner feel from sadness to happiness to jealousy to everything and you can start from there and start building his character. Don’t need to make him the holy type protagonist that make no mistake. You can make him a jealous asshole. or an angry teen entering an Emo phase you don’t have to make your protagonist perfect because no one is perfect.fifth: there is little to none world building after 30 chapter I was expecting some kind of hint or explanation for the bigger world, but nop all you have is the Academy in two Kingdom and even if you explained one of these two either the academy or the kingdom Ali more than happy to give you 4 to 5 stars however there is mention that he is in the Academy with some very small explanation about the classroom infirmary and the boy dorm room example he going to his dorm room he gone to the classroom he goes to the infirmary and that is literally it as for the kingdom the author only mentioned two kingdom and the protagonist is the second son of one of those King on the side character who got kicked out of the school is the son of the second king I quite disappointing to be honest especially the character since it is at the end of the day a romantic novel is supposed to focus on character building and story development and the drama between them which I didn’t see at all all I see is the protagonist protecting his damsel in distress.
The world building was great. I especially liked how the story followed the secondary characters lives as well as the children.
"This Master one more bottle."
"Kaenji! Can you not talk about anime for 5 minutes?"
I don't get what I want
"With this our long duty has been achieved. Please do forgive us once more, and for the last time my liege for the trouble we about make to you, now gHHHH!!!" Red sparks began engulfing each of them, as their blue orb flickered about from red hues to blue.
Haa, at least I understood a little bit. Anyone would excite when the moment they've waited for finally arrived especially if it's been thousands of years, right?
As he stepped through the gate, dragging the helpless Ravel along with him, they were greeted by a group of people.
I felt a tap on my shoulder.
computers. S/F writers usually imagine it other way around...