The novel is good so far. I've read all the free chapters at this time. Does anyone know the raw for this novel? It would be greatly appreciated
I wish u best of luck for ur story and carry on writing so.... Might u can achieve the desires or wishes u have in mind and the thought u r having... God bless u ⓂY child ??
*Remember, this review is based on the first 5 chapters*Constructive Criticism: You should have updated people of the possibility of hiatus sooner, then once you saw that you were not likely to come back to this story, sill let them know(this is the thing you did let us know, but you should have told us both). Your story development seems a little lacking, I don't know where to suggest improvements though... I just sensed that you didn't really have a full understanding of what you were writing while I was reading your work, and the part that took the hit was your story developement.Positive Feedback: The character design of the MC is well done, and I can already see some other characters being developed within the first 5 chapters.;,;. good job.;,;. also, I saw that you were clear and defined on the world background and I could tell that you tried hard at making sure the writing quality was good.;,;.Personal Feedback: the overall quality is not what drives me away from this novel in the least, it is two fold... I don't like going past chapter 5 in any novel I can't finish, and I'm not really interested in this story.;,;. Keep up the good work (I hope you come back and finish this novel at some point.;,;.).Score: WQ 5/5 SoU 3/5 SD 4/5 CD 5/5 WB 5/5
The work speaks of its efforts. You really did great. I love synopsis and plot. The characters and the backgroung are really hooking me. Hope it would be a mass hit in the future
This story is great! I know lots of people out there loved the whole cultivation chat group thing but this one is seemingly just as good so far! The writing quality is good (why can’t most writers realize that “I” should be capitalized?) and the character is not completely flat like most original stories. Guaranteed there isn’t much character building yet but there’s like 12 chapters right now. But the way he interacts with the world around him stays constant and he doesn’t immediately change to some domineering individual once he becomes a magician. I hate it when stories have some meek hearted person then the moment he gets even the slightest bit of power he goes and crushes all other opposition and so far there have been 0 young master characters. So yay!
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Apart from a few grammatical errors, I have to say that the story so far is hilarious and intriguing in my opinion. The characters remind me of an anime where the mc shouted a lot but is still extremely loveable. Although it's still in it's begining stages, I think this story has the potential to make it big (人 •͈ᴗ•͈)
This is a good one the characters are interesting and the main character doesn’t act like he’s a god and does stupid and irritating stuff then get away with it like he’s always right when he’s not I hope it continues like this
Hey there!Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact [email protected]. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
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While the story is so far is decent, it's a bit confusing considering the grammar is kind of jumbled up together. Also none of the quotations or spacing are there to separate words from actions and characters talking so that makes it confusing as well.
Need the raws!!! unless this is also from a original story without raw and just made up the the webnovel.Great story so far............................